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[Bloody_Chains_Of_Submiss]

The Morning doth come to chase away my peace
lay in bed with the window open
listening to the sounds of night
at once I'm at rest and also afraid
for the things that stalk are also within
the burning rays creep across the 'scape
scorching the blissful black away
revealing me in my starving state
I want no more than to let it all go
to become one with what I feel is right
but the other world, the nether world
the one that I am no longer part of
It calls me again with its beacon of light
forcing me to forsake my nature
I rise, despondent, and wait for the cycle
As it renews, so do I
once more a child of the night
another little bit I came up with on the fly.  Next time I'll bring in one of my notebooks and pull a couple out of there

thanks for taking a look at this.  I appreciate having somebody read it who actually understands a bit rather than freaking out and labeling me.

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Very nice....i really enjoyed this piece....i am glad i stopped by welcome home and such.....please write more....

Submiss

[Bloody_Chains_Of_Submiss]

In the growing rays of dawn
Your wings spread
all your glory as you take flight
I stand in your shadow
holding out my hand
not to hold you back
but perhaps to catch a feather
My angel, my love
my dream of things more than me
wheel in the sky
glimmering gold in the morning sun
In your freedom I take solace
that there is still something beautiful in the world

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I loved this absolutely brilliant work

Submiss

[Bloody_Chains_Of_Submiss]

The darkness descends and I rise
I join you, we become the night
the heat of your flesh as it presses against mine
the slippery of sweat soaking into my bed
sweet salty tang of lust made real
The Dali-world becoming tangible
twist together, two as one
There is not a thing in this world
that I cannot, will not do for you
you own me as I control the moves
I listen to every little gasp
every little clue that shows me how to please you
the lover's embrace
The release in the heat of passion's inferno
night becomes day
we become mortal again
if only to protect the inner us from the light

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All i can say or think right now is....Damn....

Submiss

[Saronin_Narsil]

*Reads the last word of the last work written and slowly closes the book and stretches his eyes closing to keep them from gettign drier than they already are. After he relaxes himself he looks back to the writer..* Very nice very nice, I like them very much, they seem to have been written with such care, every word thoughtfully placed where it means the absolute most, the flow just coming naturally from the arrangement. They are excellent, and I can't wait for the next assortment of works.

Frodo

[dark_angel55]

good hun..*lix*

[Sucidial Importance]

The Morning doth come to chase away my peace
lay in bed with the window open
listening to the sounds of night
at once I'm at rest and also afraid
for the things that stalk are also within
the burning rays creep across the 'scape
scorching the blissful black away
revealing me in my starving state
I want no more than to let it all go
to become one with what I feel is right
but the other world, the nether world
the one that I am no longer part of
It calls me again with its beacon of light
forcing me to forsake my nature
I rise, despondent, and wait for the cycle
As it renews, so do I
once more a child of the night
another little bit I came up with on the fly.  Next time I'll bring in one of my notebooks and pull a couple out of there

thanks for taking a look at this.  I appreciate having somebody read it who actually understands a bit rather than freaking out and labeling me.

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oooh love that one...sorry im so far behind but ill catch up, im working on it now...im off to work my way to that really long thing i had to scroll through on my up...cant wait! ill post again when im done! hehe luv ya! mc

[Sucidial Importance]

I drink
far too often and far too much
but what is left?
the world I live in
has no room for me
the company I seek
so far removed
My heart is open for all to see
but I am damned for my
ability to feel
I would share it
nurture it
grow it to give to you all
but every effort is met with
every resistance
Still I give all that I am
in the hopes of finding one
who feels as I do
that the world has left them behind
that society spins without us
that we can be okay
without the rest of the faceless mass

oohh that is very good...quite perfect...i love this line:

but every effort is met with
every resistance

your words say things i could never say but always think...

[Sucidial Importance]

holy hell i'd missed more than i thought! well where to start....about your post on how jacked up the world is...well i cant say i understand completely because i havent been divorced hell ive never married but i do agree in your saying that everyone here is somehow linked by the rooting of misunderstanding...what hurts the most though is the lack of trying to understand...luv ya and we'll always b here for ya! now for the poems...couldnt comment on all of them but i read them all..so i pulled out my very favorites....off i go!

And here I dwell
In my own twisted little
self-important Hell
I've given all that I had to
find that I haven't given anything
at all
You all are my loves
you all are my pains
you all represent
All the things that make me man
A vision of strength
painted on glass
just one little tap will send it
all to the winds
All I've tried to be
and all I've wanted in this
is to just be right
to be good
to be just
to understand
and to not be belittled for that
I've beaten myself down
while you tried to pull me up
by my own two hands betrayed
I've not cut myself
nor kissed the barrel
but my truest friend of late
has been in the bottle
I choose my death so slow and lingering
keep my scars hidden inside
turn me out to show this ache
a desire for fire to cleanse the slate
I still feel the love
it's undirected and wild
I still feel the hate
that keeps me from receiving the love
I love you all
goddammit, I love you all, don't you see
this is my one cry for help
even as my raw throat bleeds
you've seen me low, seen me weep
seen me out of control, so indiscreet
but I have nothing left in me now
but to love you all
Please take this
and know it to be true
that there can be no me
if there is no you

I love that!..it's amazing and im awestruck at all the emotion in it...i can feel so much of what you are saying...i would pick out my favorite parts in the poem, but i love the whole thing!!!

The darkness descends and I rise
I join you, we become the night
the heat of your flesh as it presses against mine
the slippery of sweat soaking into my bed
sweet salty tang of lust made real
The Dali-world becoming tangible
twist together, two as one
There is not a thing in this world
that I cannot, will not do for you
you own me as I control the moves
I listen to every little gasp
every little clue that shows me how to please you
the lover's embrace
The release in the heat of passion's inferno
night becomes day
we become mortal again
if only to protect the inner us from the light

I'm with Submiss on that one....DAMN! hehe...brilliant!


My eyelids close
Like the lid of a coffin on the light of life
Darkness consuming
Welcoming
All the love I thought I once felt left in the world above
Isolated, I journey down
There is nothing there anymore
Nothing here anymore
Nothing anywhere anymore
That I can be a part of and not feel guilt
Nothing that I can leave behind
And not feel guilt
For all I do, all I think,
Is inextricably linked to a world that cannot accept me
That world that I cannot allow myself to be accepted in
For all my love and all my will to give
There are none left to accept it
Blinded still by the tears I hold
My heart that no longer beats
Blood in vein long since run cold
I long only for the whispering sleep
That even in my own self-hatred I deny me
And those who had whom I turned my back
Thinking in my strength I was saving them
Found that in my weakness I was saving them
From having to endure my downfall
Descent the only option left
No bullet can take what’s left of my life
No life I live is worth even that
I dwell here now in a world of black
Waiting for the lungs to stop what only mechanically exists
The spark dwindles and dies
And I am left once more
That which others enjoy I dread
Because that means I’m still here
What makes me stronger
Ending it
Or not?

Oh but I do have a most favorite part in that one... What makes me stronger
Ending it
Or not?
i'll be damned if that hasnt gone through my head a million times or more...i love ya for putting all my thoughts into words! okay okay almost done...now if you read thru all my posts, then THAT will show patience..lol

to step invites misstep
to love invites hatred
to try invites failure
to live invites death
all these things I am
for want of one to receive another
an existence in opposition
a study in frustration
for every desire is counteracted
and every wish is never granted

eyes look forward to the past long gone
the things I feel make sense to none
while I myself stay and rot
the world moves on

*crys* i love it...all your work is so perfectly written and...*tears*

Sleep little angel, as if the world won’t hurt you
I’ll stand in the way of its barbs
I’ll take it all to preserve you
To let you rest from your travails

So sweet, so gentle
While my hands are rough with callous
I dare not feel your grace upon me
This hideous creature not worthy of that

I would bleed to save you the pain
I would break to see you fly again
I would live to shield you
I would die to preserve you.

I think I already have


I love the last 2 parts..hell i love it all!! you are quite unbelievably blessed with your writing talent and i hope to read much more from you in the future! xxx mich

[Pinup Kitten]

I come to your thread, and still I find more apologies... I am very glad you posted in my thread otherwise I would have never noticed your work, and that would have been a great tragedy.. I am enthralled by your work and find myself very lost in it. So engrossed that when I found it came to an end I was pleased yet hardly satisfied. I hunger for more, and can't wait to see the rest of what you have to offer us...

The darkness descends and I rise
I join you, we become the night
the heat of your flesh as it presses against mine
the slippery of sweat soaking into my bed
sweet salty tang of lust made real
The Dali-world becoming tangible
twist together, two as one
There is not a thing in this world
that I cannot, will not do for you
you own me as I control the moves
I listen to every little gasp
every little clue that shows me how to please you
the lover's embrace
The release in the heat of passion's inferno
night becomes day
we become mortal again
if only to protect the inner us from the light

I've found a favorite ~shivers~

[ErrantKnight]

I come to your thread, and still I find more apologies... I am very glad you posted in my thread otherwise I would have never noticed your work, and that would have been a great tragedy.. I am enthralled by your work and find myself very lost in it. So engrossed that when I found it came to an end I was pleased yet hardly satisfied. I hunger for more, and can't wait to see the rest of what you have to offer us...
I've found a favorite ~shivers~

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To all of you whom have so honored me, I thank you. I will add more as I am able, I am currently visiting my parents and cannot hook up my laptop to their system, otherwise I would add things that I've come up with recently.

Before, I was an egotistical, selfish man who would hold something as this above others as a way to say "I see the world different from you, therefore I am better". To my chagrin, my ex found this out about me. Her life continues on, even now it is better than when we were married. I am glad for her, as anybody with any shred of knowledge of right and wrong should be, because I know I was wrong. I am now learning how to be 'right'. Respectful. Proper. Dignified.


To you
To all of you who have shown such patience
I am indebted in ways I can never repay
I have lived my life as a dead man
not caring what happened in the world around me
I am sorry
for never having had regards for the feelings of others
when all that I did was to satisfy me, I was empty
I didn't know why, worse yet, didn't know I didn't know
I was so blind
that the obvious must be revealed by ultimate loss
That the multitude of wrongs made right should hurt so
take my eyes that did not see what I needed
That I see now, with eyes wide open
Juxtaposed
Black on white, blind on sight, hate on love
All the things I was is no more
what I am is simultaneously less and more
I rebuild what I tore down that I had built up that was nothing
I do this all for you



My friends, I thank you for the rare opportunity to express this part of me in a way that people understand. I live in a place (not necessarily geographically, but emotionally) where that sort of connection is not present. You know how I found this place? by typing random words in my search browser. I am so glad that I did. I am home.

[ErrantKnight]

I am in thrall
the scent of you so heavy in the air
redolent with sweet, musky lust
I stand behind you
metaphorically, physically
my hands on you in ways we don't understand
My breath in your ear
the near-silent hiss of the grave
anticipating escape into the world above
my teeth at your throat
holding your pulse hostage
owning you, body and soul, yet I am the slave

My eyes roll back as the demon overtakes
My urge to please eclipsed only by my restraint
the time must be right, moon and stars aligned
before I take you with me on this night

In the bed that we make
in the lust that we sate
we are consumed by this pain
by this desire innate

Even as we play, even as we roll
I am ever prepared to give you control
I don't think you realize, how could you know
that you own me, body and soul

Every little breath, every last gasp
every last thing to make this last
Upon my undeserving unlife you cast
The spell of desire, I am yours at last

[Eye Candy]

It's beautiful all of them.I am now replying to your thread LOL.Keep it up hun.

Darkvamp6791

[Sucidial Importance]

Beautiful work, hun....I love them both...Your poetry is extraordinary...I'm glad you have found that you can be open here, we wish to be here for you and read everything that crosses your mind..hope to see you posting soon! xxx Mich

[Astarael]

your last poem reminds me quite a bit of me.. that is how i am in love and it is so strange to see it written out on a page in such detail... i love it..

and to you was an awesome step in your maturity in life.. i know you are very mature and have been for a long time.. but there are parts of you that never quite evolved.. and this is exactly what you need to do.. pick out the parts of you that you do not like or agree with.. things that you know you can change.. and do just that.. try to change yourself into the person you want to be.. without losing who you already are.. :5:

[ErrantKnight]

*smiles and bows head in gratitude*

much thanks to all! Even as I search for the inspiration to tap into the dark, my companions in dusk show me that there is also light to be had. All my love to you..

[Sucidial Importance]

*smiles* Glad you are back hun..hope to see more of your brilliance soon...xxx Mich

[ErrantKnight]

The other bitter flavor you left nothing else to savor
all the things we pretended to believe in were just another
set of things we needed to die in
Poison myself with interminable good will and twist the knife
you gave me to hold in good faith
we faked it, staked it out, proved to everyone that it was nothing
nobody would believe us, so we had to go this way
you went yours, I went mine and mine stopped cold
Now I'm here in the dark so damp and alone
the hypothermia is a welcome sensation
because you left me no other feeling in my isolation
at least I can feel something though I'm not sure what
You tell me it's good to get over things, but there was nothing left to get over
What is pain but an excitement of nerve endings
never ending arousal stimulating all the things that hurt me
time and again I anticipate progress but I digress
back to the point at hand, the blade in hand, the knife in back
the odds are stacked and survival in doubt
but of course you had to prove this is the only way out
and so the little journey ends on bended knee
the other leg was amputated so many moons ago
I'm left with nothing to stand on forced into slavery
Kept as an amusement to be tossed when I get annoying
Take this on, take me out, take me away and I'll come back to this
there is no escape from self when I keep myself up here on this shelf
How much is me, how much is you, and how much do I have to pay
before the books are closed

[ErrantKnight]

such a dark shell
holding within the promise
of a new tonight
so laden with intent
so rich in its threat
I want it
I want what's inside
I'll stop at nothing to get it
The vassal of my peace
the carrier of my disease
I am a slave to my addiction
bonded to this affliction
That I can't keep my mind from it
It is so insane
that it can make me this way
but I want it
can't avoid wanting it
will do anything
then I'll have it

[Sucidial Importance]

Lovely honey...hehe long and lovely...i had trouble picking a favorite part but this line really jumped out at me:

Take this on, take me out, take me away and I'll come back to this

I love it...xxx

[Sucidial Importance]

such a dark shell
holding within the promise
of a new tonight
so laden with intent
so rich in its threat
I want it
I want what's inside
I'll stop at nothing to get it
The vassal of my peace
the carrier of my disease
I am a slave to my addiction
bonded to this affliction
That I can't keep my mind from it
It is so insane
that it can make me this way
but I want it
can't avoid wanting it
will do anything
then I'll have it

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oh wow you are fast...quite good..as always lol