This is my new thread. and this is my newest poem.

“Ode To The Lady Of Our Dreams
As She Walks Of The Sun “
A Poem by Damien Renaud

In time we may learn her secrets
Perhaps, in time we may be worthy
But until then she shall be revered
As she walks of the sun
Ode to the lady of our dreams
Nights spent pondering the ideals
These melancholy meaningless things
Ode to the lady of our dreams
How she walks of the sun
And the moon
And the stars
She is the sleep in our eyes
The blood in our veins
Ode to the lady of our dreams
She is the desire to be strong
She is the will to effect change
Not the lady to which we will pledge our allegiance
But the lady we look to for guidance
Ode to the lady of our dreams
As she walks of the sun
And the clouds and the rain
Caressing the children as they play
Traipsing too and fro in their glee
Unknowing that their innocence shall not last
The harshness of the world will consume these children
And the lady of our dreams will no longer caress them
Will no longer be the rain they played in
The sun that shone down upon them
Warming their skin and their hearts
The warmth that kept them alive
They will forget the warmth and cheer of childhood
No matter how hard you try, dearest
Ode to the lady of our dreams
As she is forced to walk alone
Her tears are the rain
That falls upon the playing children
The wind is her wispy hair blowing behind her as she runs
The sun is her beautiful smile
Ode to the lady of our dreams
As she walks of the sun
Give me the knowledge of the ages
Euphoria in the blink of an eye
Control over my own emotions
Ode to the lady of our dreams
As she is forced to walk alone

Wow that was really beautiful. I really like it.
Rose

Very pretty, sweety. Care to explain? Because I don't want to say what I got from it when it may be something completely different.

*cracks fingers*

As everyone is saying this poem is amazing. But I can do better than that so here is goes. First of all your title fits perfectly with your poem. And I like it more after hearing you tell me how you came up with it and just hearing the "why" of this poem from the author makes it all the better. So thank you, first of all, for that priveledge. Although it doesn't rhyme the flow is smooth. Just like most of your other poems. You have a good talent for keeping the flow smooth and less complex.

Phavorite Phrases

"She is the sleep in our eyes"

"She is the desire to be strong
She is the will to effect change"

"Euphoria in the blink of an eye
Control over my own emotions"

Aboslutely amazing. The ending was simple yet it works and it hits you. Alone. Good job on that. I like the simplicity of the poem. But then you have a few lines in there that make it more of a simplistic dream than an simplistic reality. I love it. And you didn't O.D. on your vocab. I'M SO PROUD! hehe.

Now, as much as I love this poem and as much as you are one of my good friends I must deflate that ego a tad. If you have no suggestions of what to do then how will you be motivated to do an even more orgasmic job on your next piece? So I will say that as you get into the middle try to gradually bring the mystic mood down. You did well on your transitions of moods but there are just a few amount of lines at the end that are out of place with the mood. That's all I have to say for criticism. Great job Damien. May you continue to write to brighten and open the minds of the masses.

*Lacey*

*sigh* you make me want to die sometimes, lacey. you make me want to go all hannibal lector on myself and tie myself up to a board after I've gutted myself, then you make me want to throw myself off a balconey. Why can't I comment like you? I'm gonna go break a cd and be emo on myself now.

Have you ever taken opium?

This was amazing. Especially the part I quoted. It was like a great let down from such a beautiful thing...you know? Geeze, I haven't even begun telling you what I thought of it...Is this lady of our dreams supposed to be everything perfect? Because everything perfect ends up being something totally...*searches for word* opposite, I suppose. She was perfect, but absolutely alone. *applauds* Why is there only one poem on this page?

Lacey-As always your words are held in high regard in respect to my work. thank you so much for your compliments and your suggestions.

Ashley- I love you sweety, and i don't care if you cant comment good. As long as you read my work and tell me what you think.

In_Vain- thank you for you comment. and no i've never done opium... why?

You're poem reminded me of an opium trip for some reason...

hmmmm... that's kinda wier... but interesing at the same time... tell me about it!

I wouldn't know....

dame your poem was quite brilliant.. a quiet contemplation of the better things.. and how life's disease slowly wears away at the innocence and purity of all things... i hope to see more soon :5:

My poetry has been coming clowley to me of late. i'll try to have more soon.

How about you write a sex poem with me. My creative juices are running down my leg...So. Up to it?

kidding, kidding.

Damien, your new poem is fantastic! I hope there is more to follow...until then.

~~Jenn~~

*gasp* I have chills...fucking magnificent work.

the results of your brilliant mind are well worth the wait :5:

Wow... this site has kinda slowed down from when i was here. anyway, i am actualkly writting a script from drama ( i get to write/direct this one) anyway it's pretty interesting to, i think i'll post it on here... when i get it finished...

i hope u do i'm rereading a section in my literatue book about drama plays ect..

More, thats all i can say

Woo, well...hurry up and write it. You've been away for too long.

Ok well i finally have my comp back up... but all my songs and stuff are gone... hopefully i can recover all my poems and stuff... or i will be so pissed because... wow... ok anyway, i'll try to have some new stuff up soon.

D

We are all waiting for you anxiously, my Beautiful Stanger. *blows kisses to Damien*

~~Jenn~~

very good.i really liked it

D. You should post one of those poems you wrote for me. Cause no matter what you say, I still love them. And I love you..MORE! -runs away-