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well here goes nothing

LIPS and DARKNESS

The sharp sting of steel
a crimson flood spills over pale and scared flesh
the exhilaration of watching it flow
a tongue slides across crimson lips in anticipation
the sensual lips caress the wound drinking deeply
a throaty moan issue's forth
the lips break the delightful embrace
the flood disminshed to a trickle
that gentle tongue darts forth
lapping up the last few drop that remain
a smile creases those naughty lips as darkness once again consumes me

please let me know what you think

well here goes nothing

LIPS and DARKNESS

The sharp sting of steel
a crimson flood spills over pale and scared flesh
the exhilaration of watching it flow
a tongue slides across crimson lips in anticipation
the sensual lips caress the wound drinking deeply
a throaty moan issue's forth
the lips break their delightful embrace
the flood disminshed to a trickle
that gentle tongue darts forth
lapping up the last few drop that remain
a smile creases those naughty lips as darkness once again consumes me

please let me know what you think[COLOR=red][/COLOR]

It was pretty good, though some things didn't need to be repeated so often...try to cut down on repetition...other than that it was awesome...and remember...the more you write...the better you get...

It was good, hope there's more to read.

it was good,hope to read more soon

Hate full words etech out a pianfull littiny of lies accross my mind
with every word my soul bleeds more
the scares accross my flesh match those on my heart and soul
shall I end it through the sweet and clod embrace of steel?
No, I shall endure
for their pale fasod of normality is only to hide there shackles
they are prisoners of fasion and popular consenus
I am free and they dispise my for it