Bite my lip until I can taste the blood
Tastes like the rained on mud
Snap a rubber band
Until there’s a purple bruise on my hand
Rip out handfuls of hair
Suddenly there’s blood everywhere
A cigarette lighter can burn
My health isn’t a concern
There’s a mark on my shoulder, it’s a star
Carefully hidden beneath my shirt cuz it’s my scar
Slit my wrists until I find that vein
Swear more than I ever have before from the pain

These words I write are a testimony
To all the hidden disharmony
These lines I’ve written
Probably should be hidden
This is my suicide letter
I’m sorry but things weren’t getting better
Always remember that I’ll miss you
But I couldn’t seem to find a way to make it through
Never forget that I loved you
This is my suicide letter from the me you never knew

I never meant to hurt you at all
Do you know how many times I tried to call?
When I was crying, I didn’t want you to see
I thought you could save me
But you’re not super-anything
You were the only one who knew about everything
I know you’ll blame yourself for this
Promise me you won’t forget that hope always exists
I thought it was too late
And ended up making the biggest mistake
Please don’t cry, I can’t stand to hear you weep
Maybe tonight I’ll try to comfort you while you sleep


sorry its so long

It is amazeing, welcome to the forum!!

welcome to the forum. You'll like it here I'm sure.

I loved your poem. It was absolutely beautiful. Don't worry about the length of it. It doesn't matter whether it's long or short, it's still admired by others. I enjoyed this poem of your's I could feel the emotion in it with each and every word read. In my eyes it was absolutely flawless. Will we be able to read more? :5:

love,
krissi

Very well written, but may I state, not all poems have to ryhme.

Eternal Lies is right. Not all poems have to rhymn. They can just be words from your head, at times it can take longer to try to think of words to rhyme with another.. so not always do they have to rhyme. Although, it does add flow to the poem.. :5:

I LOOVED it. Awesome piece of work. Don't worry about rhyming or length anything like that. Those compromises always make any piece of work a debacle. Hopefully there's more to read? *eager to read new awesome works*

ooo ahhh. very nice! hope to see more.

deadly

I cant wait for more..... * sit impatiently*

yes i may say from my experience over months of practice is it is better to learn stanza perfection before rhymes. to get everything even and the flow correct. i can see since i too did it is rhyming was the first thing you wanted to accomplish. as a previous post states not all poems have to rhyme, and that is correct. so what i only suggest is relax, sit back and let the words spill from your mind like a river of emotions.

and on a lighter note, your poem was very nice. i enjoyed reading it. welcome to dark whispers.. your new home.

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QUOTE (mentally_forsaken @ Nov 30 2004, 03:48 PM)

[font=Geneva][color=green]yes i may say from my experience over months of practice is it is better to learn stanza perfection before rhymes. to get everything even and the flow correct. i can see since i too did it is rhyming was the first thing you wanted to accomplish. as a previous post states not all poems have to rhyme, and that is correct. so what i only suggest is relax, sit back and let the words spill from your mind like a river of emotions.

and on a lighter note, your poem was very nice. i enjoyed reading it. welcome to dark whispers.. your new home.

Hey! Welcome to the forum. I myself am new to it. The poem was pretty good I have to admit. Every one else has said the poems don't have to rhyme, their right. Long or short they are still great. Just put some emotion into it.. thoughts and feelings... and you can have a great work of art. Can't wait to see more from you. :angel:

Wow...that was really good...though I do hope that it wasn't true...

your poem really touched me..i think i cried..oh wel i always cry........ur a really good writer.....u really hit the spot for me......bye now...

Man, that reminds me of something I wrote... Except mine was a bit more morbid than that....

Wow we all love that it was good. You are well like from that start good for you. Welcome to the form I love it her and I am sure you will too.
Rose

*sitting at the edge of seat* can't wait for more

deadly

I agree...geez I'm like sitting on the edge here, please write more!!!!!!! It was awesome!!! I can feel everythiung you meant by it....PLEASE WRITE MORE I'M BEGGING YOU!!!!!!

-Emz-

*starts to cry waiting for new works!!*

IT'S AWSOME!i really like it.sounds alot like me.i wrote a suicide letter but well i guess it's kinda ovious i didn't kill myself.i over doesed and slit my wrist,i was in the hospital for a while.damn why did they have to find me?but yes welcome to the forum and great suicide letter/poem.

ver nice. tried suicide...didnt work..prolly try again sometime...not soon...really liked the letter/poem. it got me.

Don't you jus thate it when the people find you? They tried to get me to go to a nut house too. Tried like a gazillion ways to commit suicidie....why they always gotta find ya? Damn bastards.....anyway yea I really liked it and I still want you to write more...grrrr