Ok so not many of my songs are actually finished. In fact...I think I've only ever finished one. Lol. But I thought I'd post some little bits of my lyrics and see what happens. I would love if anyone could suggest continuances for them or better rhymes etc. I'm doing this for the improvement...so for the more experienced and tallented HELP ME OUT HERE! :D




~Nameless Fear~

I gave me heart away today
to a face I've never seen in the flesh,
a laugh I've never heard.
To one whos eyes have never peirced mine.
One whose touch I've never felt,
nor touched in return.

And now the fear builds,
decending over me.
The fear of a never-ending circle
closing to enfold me in its lonesome embrace.
This fear of forever in betrayal
through the lowering of my guard.
Fear of the heartache caused by daring,
this yearning from within just to touch your face.

This tension builds.
My resistance crumbles.
And now I lie,
uncomfortable in the knowledge of what I've done,
yet peacefull in the thought of it.
As I look inside I see
that to lose you now would be to lose a part of me.
This stranger I've always known.

To reach for you is to reach for a cloud,
as thoughts of you slip
between the fingers of my mind.
I am cursed with a desire
beyond my fragile years.
A burning need that can be quenched
only in the fire of your embrace.

And, as a single tear falls for my freedom,
I fall.
Sucumbing to the everlasting hold
of devotion to another.

very good...I like your style

And here's another....I have a thing with emotional torture...it seems to be all i can write about.

I think I'm Emo!!!!! *horrified* :lol:




As I cling to the thought of you
shattering down into shards in my eyes,
hear me scream.

Pain tearing through me,
the darkness consumes me.
How can this be real?
I don't know what I find.
When you look into me
I feel your eyes parting me.
Do you like what you see?
Destruction of my mind.

Why can't I fight you?
Why make me despise you?
Why do you play these
sick games with my mind?
Wish I could kill you.
Just die.

There was a time
when I didn't hate you,
when despise was a word
I kept for the outside.
But that time belongs
to a time long gone.
When my smile failed
to die inside.

Let me be.

indeed..this is very interesting...
I like your poems...do you have more?

Yup, you guessed it! More Emotional Shite! :D :D :D




Remove the poison from these veins,
breathe it in,
so it breaks me again.
Distills the anger that's burning within.
Breaking my will,
till I finally forgive you.

Turning my life upsidedown in the moment.
My skin is a parchment
to tell all the pain.
I've forgotten how once in my life I was happy.
Your presence eclypsed and consumed
all those days.
And now when I try
to think joy all I see
Is a picture of you,
staring down over me.
And as much as I try
to destroy you, I see
that there'd be no war,
you'd be nothing without me.

I am all that makes you strong.
It is all of my suffering that
makes you live on.
But as much as I hate you,
to set myself free,
would mean I could never
free you of me.

Without me you're nothing.
Just one more grain of sand.
And as the hour glass turns
you lose your upper hand.
This poison you give me
becomes blood in my veins
And this cycle of hatred starts over,
I'm falling again.

Break me down, and I'll see
that the tears that I've shed
make you nothing to me.
Cast away from this gyre.
Because I've seen through the mirror,
and all that I see,
is a picture of you
staring back out of me.


*shrug* :cofpap:

But wait! There's more!
Bah I'm in such a sadistic mood......*sigh* I always degenerate into this when I read my own writing...Don't you just hate that? Meh who cares. Bring on the Emo I don't give a shit anymore!!!

*is free and....not loving it*

Aw damn I've become one of those whiney ones haven't I? Someone should really get around to shooting me one day.....

I don't hate at all..I love..
your words are real and seem to come from within you
that is what I like

Well.....here's another! :devilflip:

I can go to hell, because I'm still gonna write this way anyway.


~Toke~ (I dunno I just liked the name )

Bar my senses, to stop the pain.
I'm living this torment over again.
As darkness falls....

Bury the knowledge to carry through,
living a lie, just to be with you.
Watching amy dreams as they fade away,
Once again loneliness claims me today.
As darkness falls....

Standing tall in my resolve.
The grip of man crumbling
as time rolls on, eternity calls.
The lone fighter struggling
to purge the Earth of this dissease.

Taking life in you hands,
weave the strands of missery,
tie the veins together,
leave the throat open to bleed.
Still isphixiation.
The body's heat leaves,
as a last tear falls
for the sound
of a soul's last plea.


Yeah. Ta Daa!!!!! :lol: :meow:

wow..ya know I can relate so well to this one..
I can see myself in your words...
please do write more....lol
I think you have a great talent ^_^

One more? Promise you won't go insane? Well ok. Lol.
Don't worry I'm well aware of the fact that I have issues. It only gets this bad when I write though. I swear.

Buddha, my man, feel free to read on as much as you like. :D :D :D

This one is kinda...well...different. It's not heaps different, so sorry to anyone who got their hopes up there, but it only gets real melancholy at the end...Which is something for me.





Yep, you bet, I'm late again.
The train was late,
The car broke down,
I don't really care my friend.
Call it my style, or what you will.
Find me something worth
getting out of bed for and
maybe tomorrow I'll be here on time.

But in the meantime,
Here I'll stay.
My head against the wall,
I can't hear a word you say.
It's the same old bullshit
Every day,
And I don't feel
like this today.

This cigarette is burning in my hand,
And I'll sit here staring
at this wall.
The sunlight's faded.
Can birds still sing?
I no longer know.

I'll sit here in tears
since you left me here.
Broken and shallow.
So, find me something
worth being on time for.


Wow....I really am a sad little bitch aren't I.... :help:

wow..that was amazing...so sad..and yes melancholy..
you have such strong emotions though
I love them

Thanx hun ur a sweety. I dunno where most of these come from. I'm usually the one grinning from ear to ear no matter where I go. But for some reason the moment I sit down to write this is all that comes out.
Buggered if I know............

I'll find more later. Time for bed. :meow:

indeed...masks we wear

Ever wish you could rip off the mask, but afraid of what you'd find if you did?

Well your lyrics are good to your songs. But, you need structure like a chorus and prechorus. But, you can work on that later. As far as your poems go they are really intense to me and I like that. It is like i feel what you are going through when I read them. I don't get that with a lot of people you need to keep posting so I can read more...... ^_^

Thanx Justin. :D I'm glad you finally got ur ass down here and looked! ;)

Most of these are just written as they come to me and I guess I forgot to write down which parts are chorus and verse etc because when I read through them I see it as I imagined it. Does that make any sense? I'm trying to work on building a flow between sections, but at the same time not force the rhymes.

These are the first versions of them, my rough drafts if you will.

I can't think of music for these though! It's driving me nuts! I sit here and write out these paragraphs and then can't for the life of me think of a melody or even a basic lead for them.

*sigh* I will get there....

And Buddha I'm glad you can relate to some of these writings,. That lets me know that I'm doing something right here.

you do many things that are perceived as good here..besides looking very beautiful, your poems speak to me, I can see things in your writings and relate them to my own life...
I myself do not wear masks, but I would like to find out what is behind yours...maybe in time

Lol thanx hun it's nice to know that. Blah I dunno If I have any new stuff to post though. I'll have to dig around or look for inspiration or somethin....


I NEED INSPIRATION!!! ............ *sigh*

Man I'm so sad and depressing in this thread!!! I don't know what's wrong with me! hehehehe. *Slaps herself out of it*

*skips around the room with a bunch of roses to get inspiration*

ok nope that didn't work..............
*plays with her knives instead* ..........
*plays guitar*................
*looks through magazines* ........ Oooo fun stuff.......

*goes off to write more stuff hoping it will be happier than the stuff she normally writes*

lol..ur so fun to be around

:D :D :D

Inspiration eh? Shit I just write about everything........ relationships, sex, death, killing people. There is tons of shit to write about..... :devilbook:

Awesome, awesome, awesome....give us more! You have an amazing talent so keep blessing us with it. :D

Aww you such a sweety DeathAndDarkness! Well I've kinda written a couple of other things so I'll post the tomorrow.

K well here's the new ones I was talking about:


For You --~@

The voice in my head,
yeah it's started again,
saying not to give in
to the sweet things you say.
But my heart skips a beat
at the words that I hear.
When you're leaning towards me,
whispering in my ear.

I know I shouldn't listen,
I should go, turn away,
but resistance fails me
when I look at your face.
Your eyes meeting mine
sends shivers down my spine.
My soul feels a thrill
just knowing that you're mine.

So I push away the voice
to the back of my mind
and lean into you whispered words.

They say love is Blind.

~ Catch Me ~

I hold the platter towards you
with the hope of Eternity.
My greatest gift lying apon it,
and within it a silent plea.

But as the distance grows between us,
the light fading from your eyes,
I realise my futile hopes
and the shield falls back down over me.

Draw my arms back toward me,
the platter now shielding my soul,
as the silver begins to tarnish
and from me my dissillusions fall.

Mistakes realised still scar.
Remembered deep within my mind.
So as I retreat from this failure
I leave more of my trust behind.

Now again I hold the platter,
watching as a fine line forms across.
And as it breaks I'll close my eyes,
only my heart will cry for the loss.

wow your words speak right to me

Wow you are a good poet. I never knew you wrote poetry just songs? Well none the less it was very powerful. I like poems like that. Well give me some more like that to read........ ^_^

Ok so that last one has a bit of a story behind it...well, more than the others because they all kinda have a story behind them.
I think it's my best yet though.

I had the beginnings of an idea for this really cool song, but I need a male vocalist for it because it's very much Soulfly style....and I'm having trouble getting past the intro hehehehe. But this is the intro anyway:


[Whispered evil heavy style] (Yeah don't tell me you don't know what I mean! <_<)
I'm sick of this shit you do.
I'm sick of your power play.
I'm bringing this war to you.
It's my turn to break you today.

[Massive Roar] <------why I need a male vocalist
[Drums start, then guitar and base follow]
[V1.]
For every time you
caught me in the middle,
It's another scar
I'll add to your mind.

...... I dunno I've run out of ideas for the moment......

[Bridge]
You're so full of shit.
All you said was a lie.
I've been stabbed in the back again.
That's the last time I trust your kind.



This song is actually directed at someone, but I'm still having trouble deciding how much I want to abuse them.....

hahaha...you are great..wow and very creative with your style..I like this here

Hmm I'm gonna have to take that comment back. I went to a gig last nite to see this band Flesh Mechanic. They have a female vocalist....she doesn't sing. She fucken roars better than many a male I've seen. She's fucken amazing.....I've been enthralled just thinking about her since their set. Oh my god she's so cool.

AAAAAAAAAAAnyway. I have some ideas for some new stuff. So I'm gonna write em. Might not post them for a while, but I"ll write them.


Buddha ur such a sweetheart, but just out of curiosity, what made you say that I'm great? My writing or my attitude?

Ok new song for the sonofabitch that played me.


~Broken~

{Chorus}
I was falling,
I'm broken.
So lost in this despair.
Keep thinking if I reach,
I'll still find you there.
But truth begins to hit me
when I look into your eyes.
How dare you fucking do this!
I can't breathe.
How I despise.
Just you.

{V1}
How dare you fucking sit there
and complain about your past,
The way your women treated you,
how trust bit you in the ass.

When I'm the one who's sitting here,
despising who I am,
because you sat there and told me
that you wanted to be my man.

I'm stupid cuz I believed you,
trusted she was gone for good.
But the moment I turned my trust got burned,
my heart freezing where I stood.

{Chorus}

{V2}
I tried to hold my anger.
Tried to look like I don't care,
But I die inside everytime I think
the whole time you were never there.

How the fuck could you be so shallow?
How could you play me in this way?
You could have at least had the decency
to tell me to my face.

But instead I turned back to you,
my heart ensorcelled by your charms,
only to find that you'd betrayed me
and gone back to your ex-lovers arms.

{Chorus X 2}

{V3}
I hope she follows in their footsteps!
I hope she fucks you up the ass,
and leaves you lying there as broken
as I was after you passed.

I hope I never have to see
you looking happily at me.
Cuz that would mean that all this shit
I've gone through didn't mean a thing.

{Chorus}

{Variation Chorus for end}
I'm broken,
you left me,
lying in your wake.
I'm fucking broken.
Don't know how much more
I can take.
Now I despise you.
Fucking prick!
Can you see it in my eyes?
Don't ever try that shit again.
Oh, how much I despise.
Just you.


Um yeah. I dunno if he knows who he is. But that's to him. He's a fucking asshole.

Sweet. The message got through. Gah man I have way too much anger stored up in me at the moment....plus it's 6:30am....so maybe I should go to sleep.... I'll write more later.

Sweet. The message got through. Gah man I have way too much anger stored up in me at the moment....plus it's 6:30am....so maybe I should go to sleep.... I'll write more later.

Wow loved broken...It was awsome..And I'm sure who ever he was he was defenantly an asswhole.

It's funny...now that the message has gotten through I don't really care anymore. :lol: Hehe. I guess the anger is kinda dying....but only a little. Only untill I remember some of the shit I guess...

Meh moving on and not really giving a shit no longer.

I never did let a breakup hold me down for long. I think the longest I've ever been hung up on someone is three days...so far it's bin longer...but my natural instincts are kicking in. I'm gonna go out and pick me up a guy! Heeheehee. :D

Yay now I have to write a getting over it song....! Heh.

I think I've found my inspiration. :devilflip:

Ohmygod for the first time in my life saying "I'm going to go out and pick up" worked! I picked up the vocalist to one of my fav black metal bands!!! OH YEAH BABY!!! Hehehe best nite of my life... I don't think it gets much better than that. :D

And I have new songs/poems. Yay! They're not really finished...but meh. *shrug* Doesn't mean I can't post them and just change them later. :devilflip:

your song are songs for the lost.......the lost have found them.....great work

Ok this is my semi/almost-complete getting over it song:

:lol:

{Chorus?}
Over,
that time has gone.
You're not mine anymore,
though I still feel you here.

{Verse}
Your told me always,
said that forever you'd stay,
but now that time has gone
and I'm still standing here.
There's still feelings here
but the pain has gone.
It's strange how it didn't
take that long.
But the wheel keeps turning
and I moved on.
I'm no longer lost.
From those lessons,
I'm learning.

{Chorus}

{Verse}
......(I'm not quite sure of the first couple of lines for this bit)
.......
I may never forgive you,
that's one right I hold.
That flame has burnt out now,
these ashes are cold.
You've become nothing to me,
story faded, grows old.
My eyes look straight past you
to see what time
holds in store.

{Chorus X 2}

Ok it's back to the tortured kind of writing apparently. I wrote this song while I was on a bus. I had fun, it was the first time in a long while that a bus ride has given me inspiration. It's also not finished, in fact it's no where near, but then I just couldn't wait to post it.


I spent the night
looking for you
in the bottom of a bottle.
I wrote a song for my lover.
This curse you put on me
makes me so weak.

{Whispered background}
The cresent,
this shape of my heart.

Like a child that's now fallen,
I need your help to get up.
I stand on the edge,
oh, so close to the brink.
Please let me fall.
Let me break your hold.

This next one is my favourite at the moment...I have to keep working on it, at the moment there's only about one verse.. but I'm getting there, and I have a tune for it worked out in my mind as well...so I think I'll be either editting this one a lot, or it will re-appear frequently.

This is my love song. I think it's a chorus. A very long chorus.


Strange, how you came to me,
falling into this unexpected reality.
To turn and wake and find you there,
to run my fingers through your hair.
To hold you close and hope you don't leave,
To press against you,
God, take me, Please!
Not care what they say of me.
I'm falling.
Oh, I'm falling,
down into you.

Thanx Vanished you're gorgeous. I like your stuff as well, it's short but sweet and you don't need to go through all this blathering on to get the point that you want out. It's good stuff.

whatever path we take we all end in the same place...that the important bit....all of us are telling it the way it has to be said...short / long it dosnt matter all are valid ..i love your songs....and sorry about the stonehenge shock.....

Yeah you got me on that Stonehenge one. There was a while there where I didn't know what to think. Heh, bastard *chuckles*

Why is your thread locked?!? I wanted to reply...but I was denied. *pouts* :(

Oh well I'll just reply to it here and say what I wanted to say, and if that doesn't work I'll PM you heeheehee :devilflip:

QUOTE

Good lord I go away for a couple of days, I come back and there's about four new pages!
Your thread is like vine, hun, growing evermore in the sun of our attention. I hope we who are watching can continue to help you flourish, because you writing is a tallent I hope never to see wither.

And I'm sorry if that sounds corny, but just reading your material makes me inspirational. I had to let that out before it burnt away.

....Feel the love.

I've finished my love song too, but I don't think anyone is actually looking at this so yeah. I'm posting mostly to have somewhere where they're all recorded heh. But I love this song and I get butterflies thinking about the person I wrote it for hehe. *blushes*

~ Strange ~ (I'll probably change the name)


{Verse 1}
Your eyes tell a story so familiar to me now.
I've spent so long just searching, to finally find you somehow.
Now to think that I have you seems almost unreal.
This is too good to be true, what did I do to deserve you?
I wonder why you saw me and even thought to look twice.
What possible reason could you have had to try and see through my disguise?
So I look to you now, wondering, if I can bear to trust,
not knowing if why you came to me was through love or lust.
{Whispered} {I wonder...}

{Chorus}
Strange, how you came to me,
falling into this unexpected reality.
To turn and wake and find you there,
to run my fingers through your hair.
To hold you close and hope you don't leave,
To press against you,
God, take me, Please!
Not care what they say of me.
I'm falling. Oh, I'm falling,
down into you.

{Verse 2}
So many times now I've made mistakes, and every time you've let them pass.
Simple things that I just can't get right, yet you held my hand through them from the start.
What did you see in me that could have possibly earned your loyalty?
How is it I don't know it when I'm sure it's all that keeps you?
Cuz now that I've allowed this connection to be, if it fell apart, don't know what I'd do.
All the barriers I'd placed, like iron, around mind and heart
barely lasted an hour before the touch of your hand tore them apart.
You've become that thought for me that makes me smile through pouring rain.
And as I think of you now I begin to wonder, again.
{Strange...}

{Chorus}
Strange, how you came to me,
falling into this unexpected reality.
To turn and wake and find you there,
to run my fingers through your hair.
To hold you close and hope you don't leave,
To press against you,
God, take me, Please!
Not care what they say of me.
I'm falling. Oh, I'm falling,
down into you. (Carried at end)

{Verse 3}{Change in tempo}
How is it,
that you know me so well?
How are you able
to look straight into me?
Why is it, I know,
you'd catch me if I fell?
What do you see in me? (Carried)
{It's just so...}

{Double Chorus}{Altered}
Strange, how you came to me,
falling into this unexpected reality.
To turn and wake and find you there,
to run my fingers through your hair.
To hold you close and hope you don't leave,
To press against you,
God, take me, Please! (Carried)
I'm falling! Oh, I'm falling!
To need you more every time you're near,
to know you're standing without fear.
To feel my heart clench when I look to you,
knowing I've fallen,
nothing I can do.
I'm falling. Oh I'm falling,
down into you.
Oh, I'm falling, down into,
down into you. (Carried)
{You}


Yay I love this song. All I have to do now is figure out a melody for the verses...

Beautiful
Your songs and poetry are simply that. There is nothing else to say but that.
And I am sorry for whatever happend..that made you hurt.
Your words are beautiful and I loved the new song..I was picturing how it would sound an everything..it was awesome.. :)

Awww thanx hun. You're a sweetie. And with the whole hurting thing, meh, *shrug* shit happens. We've both been through it before, I know that much.
As far as I'm concerned it worked out for the best. Nothing shows you a person's true colours like the way they treat you behind your back. I learnt my lesson.

:D Now I've been able to have certain naughty conversations with one of the closest things to a god I've ever met hehehehe. :D
Ah you gotta love it. Aaaaanywhoo........

And yeah I LOVE this song. What kinda sound did you get for it? I can't think of a melody for the verses, you got any ideas?

yeah yeah ok ... IM THE FOOL YOUR THE WINNER...
lol.....
ill go unlock it.......i wish that song was for me....

and if it was i wish they would tell me....
not that im saying u wrote it about me.....lol
but if the someone

...u wrote that for is still around id just come clean and tell him my girl
( my god that was hard work)


tell him...soon ok

wanna see the frog prince take a look at my pics lol


i

And yeah, I have another 'hate' one... I alternate I think. One hate one love....one love/hate... Who knows.

But yeah....



Damn you for inspiring the rage.
Let it tear you apart
as you burn in the fire of your own creation.
Hatered reigns eternal
at the merest whisper from you mouth.
Let it rip into me
washing away any trace of
pity or forgiveness.

Curse you for awakening this desire,
to sink my hands into your flesh,
tear you limb from limb and watch
as the blood drains from your pieces
as they lay scattered across a floor
black as night and cold a death itself.
I'll bathe in your blood as the light
fades from your shattered being.

Shred the curtain drawn over that evil,
this concoction of rage, hatered and loathing.
Released into your mind
with the torture of realisation,
watch as it tears through your conciousness
destroying as it goes,
wishing it could be me painting that picture
of horror and despair on your face.

Mount your head apon a wall
for all my enemies to see.
Every scream you make I'll keep,
remembered in a jar in my mind,
keeping them for a rainy day
when the thought of your destruction
will once again light the glowing coals,
of my vengeance burning within me.


I think I might work on that one too...

Lmao Vanished you're hillarious. YAY opening of the threadness!!! *grins hugely*

I'll tell him one day...but it's kinda a little soon to be showing him it right now... Um and as much as I hate to say it...if he did see your pics, well, he'd be shown up. But he's mine, so that makes him special hehehe.

Oh and don't you worry I'm sure there's quite a few women on this forum with poems and songs about you. ;)