hey guys, just wanted to see what you thought of this poem i just wrote...


The clouds gather ‘round me
hovering, I am safe and secure
if not for the lies
it be you that I’d adore

Giving the pain from your black heart
my ears swollen and my eyes blinded
I fall into a dream and sink away
wishing no more our souls be binded

My mind is caught in this web
this web, neverending and deep
where the only way to escape
is to do my deathfall leap

The fire inside keeps me alive for a moment
just for a moment, one more breathe
there are no angels gracing the line
only these dark words of mine

this is so sad...wow..the emotions are good...
*hugs you* so sad

here's another poem i wrote...i know, not very long

This dream floats through my head
with melodies from an angel’s voice
consciousness feels so soft, unbroken
awakening would never be my choice
these memories will only be mine, unspoken

really do not create new topics in the poems thread..only one topic per person is allowed for there are so many....just add replies to the first thread..welcome..Ilike your poetry

gorgeous poem.. and welcome to the forums

the only critisizm i can add is a gramatical error..

QUOTE

it be you that i'd adore

should be "it'd be you that i adore"

great job though and i read your other poem.. it was amazing as well..

yeah i was thinking that might have been ass-backwards, but thats what makes it unique :P

i suppose it does.. anyway remember only one thread ((topic)) per person ;p

YES MASTER :devilnaughty:

*pulls out a whip* don't you know it :D

DAMN, THAT WHIP WOULD FEEL SO GOOD RIGHT NOW!!!!

*cracks the whip* but because i'm sadistic i think i'll deny you the pleasure..

well at least you didn't stick it up my ass

don't tempt me ;p only joking though..

hey astarael, how do i edit my profile?

Look up at the top and go to 'My Controls' and once you're there you should see edit profile..

cool, how does this look? :)

I think it's Great work!...And I can relate to it as well.

Peace and Love,
MourningAngel... :ph34r:

ooo yay i own someone :D

is there any way to send instant messages on here?

not until you have posted 100 times

yes PM or Personal Messages but like buddha said.. not until your 100th post..

well i only have 90 more to go.....but i wanna go home to my master :(

notice my sig did you ;)

awww that is so sweet

sig?

shish buddha....

and waster.. do you have AIM or YIM..

lol..good poetry you two make together

i do but i had to give my computer back to my dad a couple of months ago....want my email address? it's just as fast cause im at work

well you should download them again... ;p

email is fine if you want..

he didnt give the computer back though...so the one up here at work is the only one i have access to. here it is... bpaul@firstam.com

but can't you download them to your comp at work ;p

they have a damn firewall up here. it sucks, i cant even see any boobies :( lol

well it serves you right..

i could serve you right ;)

i'm sure it could :D

you should post your other poem on this thread..

it? i said i, what you thinking? :P

this one?

This dream floats through my head
with melodies from an angel’s voice
consciousness feels so soft, unbroken
awakening would never be my choice
these memories will only be mine, unspoken

i also have this one....

As I look into your eyes
they take me to a place
of freedom, where I can escape
and my spirit takes a new shape

As I caress your smooth skin
my body feels overtaken
your soul floats through my fingers
and on through my body it lingers

As I kiss your lips softly
my heart beats and flutters
I’ve never tasted anything so pure
in this moment I feel most secure

As I hear you breathe
all else is forgotten
everything else is severed
it’s just you and me forever

hey finally.. poetry.. that's what some of us come here to do.. read eachother's poetry..

*cough*hint*cough* :D

hey i haven't seen you post any....so *sticks tongue at you*

HELLO!!! waster um how are youuu!!! NIIICE poetry very cool and sad. And um you better becareful with your master she can be abusive sometimes! hehe Well that can be good lol. . . HEY!!!! AstaraelCan I rape waster?? please!! hehe *looks at sahie's jealous and evvviiiil eyes and runs away* Ok bye Waster!! lol You got alot of talent

PS/ stop by my thread sometime hehe

it's ok i love the abuse, especially when it's astarael

*~*~*~yay~*~*~*

and what do you mean i haven't posted any.. i have an 18 page long thread.. and i just posted a poem this afternoon.. deadly - hmm i don't know if i should give up my slave to you.. you already rape me why do you need to rape my property too ;p

Your poems are great, but I especially enjoyed this one! Hope to see more from you soon! ^_^

i still havent looked at all of them....im sorry

it's ok ladies, theres enough of waste to go around ;)

that's if its ok with astarael...but i got to go i'll be back tomorrow

:muah: to my master

*huggles* see you tomorrow

here's one i wrote last night *inspired by astarael* :)

i dont have a title for it yet, so im open to suggestions

She said come lay next to me
I felt my body floating to her
feeling her head seek comfort on my chest
our spirits were one not on this earth

‘Twas not bodily urges we seeked
it was only unchallenged intimacy
we desired and aspired
to fulfill each other’s fantasy

When our lips grazed each other’s
the universe stood still
this is what I express to you
my heart for you, I spill

Just a glimpse of your eyes makes me smile
your touch moves a tingle down my soul
silence fills the air
and in this moment we are whole

Demons and angels will forever clash
eternity is what shatters
but both you and me know
we’re together forever, that’s what matters

i dont know if there's already one going on, but i would like to start a poem and have one person add the next line and then another and etc...

In this coven I feel the lust

here's another...its a work in progress


I’m the shadow in your light
I’m the weakness in your fight
I’m the evil in your heart
I’m the end of your start
I’m the black in your lungs
I’m the sore on your tongue
I’m the hole in your chest
I’m the worst of your best
I’m the scar that will not heal
I’m the cancer you can't feel
I’m the disease you’ll never check
I’m the knife across your neck
I’m the sharpness of that knife
I’m the end of your life

very good work on that last one flows nice and smooth almost like u can feel the next line without having to look what it says very nice work keep it up ^_^

hehe thankies for the poem