here's my little contribution. all my scribbles are written according to my mood and feelings, so i'm sorry if any of them are or look the same. a few of them are originally in portuguese, i apologise if the translation is not the best.

and here's the first. written a few years back, when i was feeling lonely.

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Where Are You?

Surrounded by people, I feel lonely.
Lost from the world, I see in me
What no one else can see,
I’m dying.
I die each day that goes by, each smile I don’t get, each dream I lose.
But the more I fight, the more I fall into the night and
Not even the world’s help can save me…
Where are you?

and this one was an important time in my life...

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you left me broken hearted
you used me and then
you went away
I thought I had in you
a friend
a brother
a lover
you left me here
waiting for something
I would never get
you gave me words of trust
you gave me promises of love
in the end I received
words of despise
promises of betrayal
I still wonder why
why did you do it
why did you leave
I was only seventeen
you meant the world to me
I would do anything to see you happy
I would lose my soul to save yours
you made me believe in everything you said
you made me think we could be together
you made me dream of a future with you
yet you left me
still you went away
forgetting everything you said
ignoring my feelings
shattering my belief in love
destroying my trust in people
leaving me empty
leaving me senseless
... I hate you!!!

I would break that into two more stanzas. Then I think the poem would have a little more dege and would remain in its "shot bursts" which does well for the capturing of well.. being alone... maybe have a little break between "I'm dying".

Like

Space- Line - Space.

Hope that helps.

i wrote it like that a few years ago, so i want to leave it that way. i don't pay attention to spacing normally, i just write my feelings down.

thank you for your post, i appreciate it.

wow..I am very interested to see more glimpses into your mind

Look at me
What do you see?
Let me tell you
I’m simply what you see
A girl with black hair and green eyes
But there’s much more to that
I’m the geeky one sitting at the back in class
I’m the lone one at a café
Puffing away on a cigarette
Eyes down
Avoiding contact
I’m the one to whom people talk
Just to be polite
I’m the one that never talks
For not having an interesting subject
I’m the girl sitting opposite you
On the train home
Listening to her music
Staring at nothing
I’m the one that hopes in vain
I’m the one that dreams
Only to wake to a nightmare
I’m the one that hates being tolerated
I’m the one sick of lies, lies and more lies
When my life is nothing but a lie
I’m the one with a thousand dreams
But too coward to follow them through
I’m the one looking at others
And locking herself in
I’m a girl pretending to be something I’m not
Just to be accepted
I’m a girl like the others but
Dead to the World…

aww, miau, thats so sad. You're not all those things you say, but the poetry is good. Keep it up, hun

the poetry is not good. it's just writing... but thanks

Wow, I love what you have to say. I can relate to those things too much, I'm afraid. I'm that girl too. I would love to hear more of your thoughts and feelings! Keep posting, please! ^_^

thank you, LingeringDarkness

deep emotional work i like it it conveys your emotions well

thank you dark_lord