OK. My first poem. Here it goes:

Lonely

She's a lonely girl
Living all alone in this cruel world
Where every ones to def to hear her soul screaming
To blind to see her heart bleeding
Every day she takes one step closer to the edge
But still she holds back the erge of death
Every night she dreams about taking that one fatel leep
And being happy as her head hits the cold concrete
One day it was made a reality
And she was finaly happy own little heaven of death
She was glad she wasted that one last breath




Well. that's my poem. Hope you liked it.

Good poem Em. It waas good. Keep it up. Oh, yeah. I get to play welcome team, so WELCOME!!!

Hello Em! Nice to see you on! Great poem, can't wait to see some more..

Thankies all.Heres another one.

Nightmare

I'm so tired of being here
NOthing seems to be going right
Every day gets worse but still I fight
When happiness finaly comes
I get scared because the worst is still yet to come
Most of the time I see myself in the back of a herse
The worse the worse
To find myself in a grave yard
Infront of a grave stone
But when i look up it is now my own
Suddenly i wake up
In my room
In my bed
And you are there holding my hand
It was just a bad dream
But at least I can say i will wake up
Wake up to another day

Aaaaw that poem is so emotional....
Peter's rating: 10/10

THat was good, Em. I didn't know you could write stuff like that. Your allways so hyper and happy that it's sometimes scary, but that had intense emotion, so, good work.

Thanks you guys.Kat I know I'm peppy almost all the time but there is a dark depressing side to me.Believe it or not.I know i scare every one what makes you any different.



Empty Minds

The world is filled with empty minds
Empty minds that dont value life
Life that can be beautiful
The beauty of this world world can be unvaled
Unvaled to the ones that can't look out side the box
The boxs that holds them back from the light
The light that opens their eyes to a new world
A world that is worth living for

I always used to act like I'm happy but until I met Kaitlyn, I always used to be miserable. You and Kaitlyn make me happy now, so thanks you two...
:Huggles both:
That's some expressive writing you did there, good work ^_^

*hugs back*you should try writing poems peet.

Good poem Em *huggles*
Peter, you should try writing poetry. I know you'd be good at it.

Em, keep up the good, expressive writing(and, stop eating chicken!)

Lol stop eating chicken Em! Lmao!
I would If I didn't suck so much ^_^

I had one piece of chicken.SHEESH!

Demand

There's a rustle out side
Darkness falls
The children are terrified as the last light
Goes out
They come when its dark
When you are alone

The children scream
But no one hears
Their faces full of blood and tears
And now they will no longer be there
To scream

Because they were taken by the demands that lay
In the darkness of the night
The ones that come out
After the last light

We know Em. We're only messn' with ya. Good poem. Keep up the good work.
^ _ ^

I know you were just messin' with me.No warries.

Suicide

Tears are falling from my face
I feel like you are there behind me,whatching me
The wind feels that of you fingers running across my face and through my hair
I look down once more at the buisy city bellow
I am scared that you will be to late
I can not wait any longer
Now I know this is my fate
The fate that will end both my pian and agany
I leep out into the cold empty air
Happiness comes over me as i hit the ground
And my cold lifeless body goes into a deep sleep
From wich I will never wake up and never return

it's good to see you writing em. i saw thoughts in you that i felt would be well-placed in poems or at least some form of writing. thank you for sharing these with us. it will help the emotions flow through and out of your body with each and every poem you write, so don't be afraid to write whatever you feel. you know that here you will only be loved and not judged

welcome to the forum (yes, delayed, but oh well)

Great poem Em, keep it up.

These are great! I especially love Suicide. Great work, keep it up!

i wonder why.*rolls eyes*.

unnoticed: part 1

I sit in the dark corner
Unnoticed by the world
Even in the light, I am unseen
So what's the difference?
There is none to me
I am not yet dead
But I soon will be
But who will care?
I know not even me
No one will notice
That I am gone
Because no one notices me
Neither at sunset nor dawn.

Unnoticed: part 2

I shove the knife into my throat
My warm blood rushes out of my viens
And pores onto the floor
Like a river rushes out into the open sea
I feel myself leave my body
I am now just a spirit
I look down at my cold lifeless body
But that's not all I see
I see people actually running over to me!
They seem sad over me
They cared
They realy cared about me
But it is too late
There's no turning back
No one, not even God, can open the gate of death

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Can any one figure out what this poem I wrote is trying to say?Don't answer to this Kat I know you know.

Real?

What you think is real isn't realy real
But the things you don't think is real is real
But if the things that you don't think is real that realy is real
Isn't realy real because your not real

I loved unnoticed. It was great! Stop by my thread sometime, and keep writing.

eh, you know i attempted understanding this and failed :P
i think you need to try rephrasing it a bit though to make it a little clearer. or just tell us what you meant :devilflip:

*waves hand in air* O O O O!!!! I know what it means. I figured it out a LONG time ago. Can I tell them Em?

tell you what. see if you can figure this out. if you can't, i tell you what it means and you tell me what your thingy means. if you do figure it out, i'll have to resort to asking kat behind your back what your thingy means


Forget
or live no longer
or, then, only the night, the night, the night!


from Emma Shapplin's song Spente le Stelle (the stars have gone out)

Hey Em well I tried to decipher what you meant in the poem....


Ok in other words; a line by line analysis

All the mean and bad things you believe about yourself are not true
But the actual positives (eg your achievements etc) that you do possess you overlook
However because you don’t believe that you have these positive qualities in you
They don’t actually exist because you are not being truthful to yourself and not accepting yourself for who you really are.

So am I right?

Oh and Andreas (DE) if you are giving them Emma Shapplin’s lyrics give them the lyrics for the whole song.... at least that will give a direction to the thought process.

that sounds pretty logical to me. if it isn't right, then.... make it be right! :devilflip:


gah, fine!! make me type it all up, sheesh

Spente le Stelle

You've lost this heart
While chasing after a mirage
You've betrayed this heart
And I can do nothing but hate you
Can you hear my pain?
Your voice dies
And stupid as I am, I wait for you forever

Forget
or live no longer
or, then, only the night, the night, the night!

The stars have gone out
With the pale moonbeam
Love cries
That rushes forward like a wave
Then disappears
The night is empty
And the hope it brings is brief
Bitter tears fall
A broken heart, despairing
Passes by...

What has happened to the empty dreams?
Where have the brief temptations gone?

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there, see if that helps more

Hey all you have to do is copy and paste .... you are using it as your wallpaper you know :P

Sorry I have'nt been posting lately.Muse you were very close.Andreas that song says different thing to different People..So basicaly there is no wrong or right anwser.

OK, this is what she meant......:

QUOTE

Real?

What you think is real isn't realy real
But the things you don't think is real is real
But if the things that you don't think is real that realy is real
Isn't realy real because your not real

She means that nothing is real!!! You people are sssllllllllllooooooooowwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!! That one is so easy to figure out!!!!!!

Now that's not very nice Kat.Some of us aren't as mentaly challanged I mean as smart as you.

:lol:

:devilflip:

You all might not understand this poem but iI do..If any of you understand it than im glad.

Wisper

She is but a wisper in the wind
That calls my name
Calls me to the darkness
I hear but I do not listen
I have the mental strenght to glissen
I will not give up
I will not give in
For my soul is to presious to loose
In the light I will stay
For every night
And every day

mmmm. . . HELLO!!! How are you? I like your poems alot!
I think that this poem is about someone trying to fight away from the one who makes him feel pain, and he will not let her hypnotize him, its sort of like she gives him nothing but suffering right? So he will not give in, he is strong enough to not listen to her call. Right? Anyways if its not then fuck it! :devilflip: :devilflip: I give up. And anyways stop by my thread some time and don't forget to leave comments I would appreciate it alot!

Yes, I really like your work, I can really feel their meanings, most of them. :) keep up the terrrrrific work!

Em, that was a GREAT poem. I feel the pain that that person feels just through your words. Your writing has already started to improve. Keep up the good work.

i've heard Wispers like that in my head before, so i'm pretty sure i know what you're talking about and, consequentially, i can relate to the poem pretty well. nicely written em. i like the message you carry through with it

Yes you are correct about what I was saying in that poem and I will stop by your thread.

Thank you all for those comments.They make me feel like my poetry is actualy good.

I think you guys will realy injoy this next poem.

Fade Away

I can no longer think of anything that brings me joy
My heart is being clouded
I can no longer see
See what brings me joy
Nothing makes sence any more
I feel my heart slowly dieing
My hope has faded away
I see my life
Just fade away
Its right infront of me
But just out of my reach
I now see you
Slowly fade away
I see all the light fade away
Its dark
Dark once agian

This is a pritty happy poem but I think its pritty good.

All You

I think about you all day
And dream about you all night
You are every where to me
You are the sun during the day
And the stars during th night
You are my light in the darkness
You are the wisper in the wind
You are are my hope
When all seems lost
You are the joy within my heart
You are my breath of fresh air
But without you
I am nothing
But a person in despair

i liked the way you closed off All You with that rhyme. it wrapped it all up very nicely.
as far as Fade Away goes, "been there, done that", so i know there isn't an awful lot to like about feeling like that. the poem does transfer the feeling (to me at least) very well, so i do like that aspect of it

keep writing, em, and you'll keep improving like you have been :)

Thanks.I hope I keep inproving.Anyway here's another poem.

Alone

I sit in the darkness
Alone and scared
There is only light
For a few brief seconds
For there is only light
When lightninge strikes
They come for me tonight
I feel it
It is so cold
You can see my breath
I am so scared
I wish I were dead
The beat of the lightning grows stronger
It won't be much longer
The big boom nocks me off my feet
They are here and ready to feast

*huggles Emmy* Wounderful my big sis. Keep writing so little sis can keep replying. lol

Kat are you feeling ok..Because your scaring me..It's ok to call me big sis over the phone but oh for get it.....Come here little sis.*gives you a big hug*

ahhhh tiz time for the feazt eh!



heheh sorry, that's what came to mind when i read it :devilflip:
sorry if it comes across as a bad comment, it's not meant as one :)


gotta love the imagery though :D

You warry me sometimes Andreas...but then agian i warry poeple sometimes too so...yeah..*clears throat*yeah moving on..Normal people scare me.What about you?

O O O!!! You look at me funny because I'm differant, I look at you funny cause your all the same. mwahahahahahahahahaha.

Kat have you forgotten who you are talking to....I am beyond werid....i scare my own family...heheheheheh

Hello shattered I think I never posted anything on here. . . .which is a shame, your poems are deliciously dark I love them, Keep up! and thanks for your comment. You have a great talent dear.

Actualy you have posted but I'm not complaining...So,yeah...Moving on.