The idea of expressing how I sometimes feel came to me yesterday and I felt that I had to write a poem about it.

Alone
Sea's darkened waves like ferrel creatures
In chaos raced towards the land,
Their angry faces in frustration
Had scraped and gnawed the moonlit sand.

A blistering wind of pre-storm autumn,
Was trampling through the deep blue trees.
A lull, and it again is flying
It comes, it's near, it feels and sees

Inspects then quickly disappears.
It’s always wild and free to roam.
Eternal life yet endless sorrow -
A curse to always be alone.

that sounded awsome i like how it flowed together.

i wish i had some good criticism to make on this because you know how much i love putting you down ( :D ) but the only thing that didn't go right was the rhyme in the last stanza. i'll let that pass though because i really loved these lines:

they're awesome


soooo, welcome to the wonderful and wacky world of the forum :D

you should post your bird poem next dude, that thing was a ripper *kicks you for being able to express his vision better* :devilflip:

Aah and here we have our wanderer of the mind. So skilled at navigating the inner sanctums of the one true gift that humanity possesses. Much has been said of you and only praise i may add. Welcome to the forums and if you would view Alexandria's thread i believe i have said enough along that line. The poem was gorgeous and i have written some on a similar thought yet yours brought a new element to the inspiration. It flowed magnificently and you displayed a remarkable vocabulary. Along with your adept imagination which is the only door to see the truth of the world in my personal opinion. Anyway i will stop rambling and leave you to your thoughts. Please do continue to post your poems, whatever it is that comes to mind for i am sure that there will be many who would be keen to listen. Once again welcome to the forums and i hope to see you again soon

~Sasha

see man, i told you sasha always finds wonderful words to say even for the worst possible things :)
heheheh *ducks out of the chair flying his way* :devilflip:
seriously though, listen to her, she pretty much always manages to say what i would've liked to have said in a way that only the sashan mistress can say :)

in other words, sasha rocks, and so does your poem, so keep writing more and you er.... can keep rocking together?? ewwww *kicks you out of the way and drags sasha away from you*

Thanx for the kind words, as I have said to Andreas (aka DE) just yesterday I haven't written poetry for over 3 years now and it was good to again put thoughts on paper.
Here's another one, I wrote it a few hours ago.

Hawk
Your focus shifts and feathers ruffle
You slice through air in search of prey
You have no rules but total freedom
And yet you choose who next to slay

As you consume your bloody victim
You cut its flesh and meat you chew
It has not yet become apparent
But power has consumed you too.

*is better with words than andreas* you are just lealous B)

((not to mention perverted)) :devilflip:

okay, let me re-create, as best as i remember, the scene from our msn chat when you showed me this:
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FUCK YOU!!! :P
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that was the basic gist of it :D
mostly because i had a damn similar vision which i just couldn't give words to. so that's why he deserves this:
"F*CK YOU!!!!"

but yeah, you're setting yourself up to receive quite a standing ovation from people who will read your thread.
keep it up dude, keep the flow goin and keep the poems rollin

the poem doesn't show up for my comp *cries* andreas copied and pasted it but still......

Well anyway *wipes away a tear* once i did read the poem of course i thought it was amazing. People in this day and age can be filled with such greed and it seems that the world now thrives only on money. Being overwhelmed with greed and power will end up bringing you down in life. If all you care for is what you have in the bank than your life is no life, for without the things that really matter like love, friendship, family and all of the other sweet sentimentals you hold nothing in your heart. You displayed this with imagery and great vision. Keep up the awesome work

~Sasha

Your vocabulary and thought process is amazing! I loved both your poems! Superb!

Oh thanx guys you’re too sweet :) - makes me wish I wrote more... oh well I’ll post more on Saturday ... Uni is a real pain so I should probably do some work for a change.

*slaps you around like a ragdoll* asshole, you told me you were going to sleep :P
if you were gonna be on for another half an hour you could've downloaded aim and said hi to sasha you mean turd :P

anyway, may you fare terribly in your tertiary efforts my friend and may the jaws of doom and failure spread wide to consume your soul

*had to say that*
see? this is how you spam threads and get your post count up :D

*huggles andreas* you didn't even say hi... so mean.... though i won't get into torturous detail because.. well... dark knows from personal experience how mean i can be with that.... shredding his body, ripping out his heart and consuming it....

wow..thats deep ^_^

Awesome. Your poems are very good. You should definitely write more andput it here. Share your talents with the rest of us. (like I'm one to talk) No really. Those were great, especially the first one (i forgot the title, sorry). keep it up!

You seem to have quite the fanclub brewing already, see you when you return ^_^

Those are really good. Thanks for veiwing my page by the way. All I can say for now. D**M DOGS. One got out again. Time to run. Hope to see more of your work. ^_^

Hey guys. I am trying a different approach to poetry. It is based more on feelings and pictures. So if you could write any suggestions about the good and the bad of it please do.

Autumn

The air grew fresh as rosy colours
Enveloped, light translucent clouds,
The park was calm, the silence only broken
By evening songs of birds, and rustling sounds
Of autumn leaves.

The fall disguised the paths and alleys
A yellow carpet spread below
Wind’s tender touch, caressed and tugged the foliage
On showing crowns of trees, which seemed aglow
In twilight rays.

well, you already know my view on it, so i'll be waiting to see the rest of it come to life :D

words spelled by the wind,
takes it's roots in the images inside the earthly mind
I take my hand and touch the words
like they were small flowers... I am trying to say that I really like your poems...

i really liked "Alone" and "Autumn" you captured the the image of the autumn... so beautifully and flowing.

"Alone" was simply divine. i loved it... i know what it's like to feel like you're cursed somehow to live forever in solitude. you use such beautiful words to describe the pain of being alone.

very talented...

'Autum"(I know I spelled it wrong!!) was beautiful! You had a good sence of imagry in it. Honastly, I have no suggestions. I'm glad you are trying new things, for without trying new things, well, life would be plain boring!! I hope you keep up the good work. ^_^

Autumn was gorgeous and the only critisism that i can offer is to make it longer..

I just love your poetry!!! It's wounderful. Please post more.

unlike me, the dude studies haha

he'll probably be returning any one of these days

Muse ignore us for studying...






He is E-V-I-L

EVIL I TELL YOU EVIL

well someone's sure throwing a pissy fit today ;) hahah

SHUT UP

I WILL HEAR NOTHING FROM THE LIKES OF YOU TODAY



i still hate you.....

*looks around confused* What the hell is going on with you today Sasha?! What did Andreas do? Can I help?!

Hey guys I’m back.
Yes! the exams are over *does a cartwheel, falls flat on his face, shakes the dust off and sits back down again*.... hmmm what’s this a live break-up show :) ... ok I’ll just sit back and watch....

Hey, nothings happening..... damn I came too late :( *grumbles*.

Hmm ... no title for this one. No there isn’t anyone like that but the image was rather interesting I thought.


Where morning dew like crystal sparkles,
Where sounds of angels wings descend
And gentle rain entrances walkers
You built a sanctuary my friend.

Let me come in, enjoy the beauty,
Of deep, dark, emerald glowing gaze
That you possess. And hold you tightly,
Like my heart wrapped in your embrace.

And in that moment of pleasure
My knee I slowly bend for you
A moment I forever treasure
As angles songs have become true.

awwwwwwwwwww musey wusey is proposingggg





heheheh

*cough*
i like the imagery. it's interesting and weird to see you write this kind of thing hehe
it's good though when you can view a moment from another's perspective, it helps you grow as an artist and a writer i think.

keep it up dude

Haha yeah DE I know what you mean... but it is all about expanding your horizons and applying yourself to different fields. That is what I am attempting at the moment. It can be fun to try – you should as you have enough experience under your belt.

i do that when i'm mentally stable enough to do so hahah
and when there isn't too much testosterone running through me to think about anything other than sex :D
of course, erecting a temple at which i can be worshipped doesn't help reduce the testosterone levels, but eh hahaha

The poem was gorgeous and beauty resided not only in the imagery but in the heart behind each word.

Note: suidal dream is a bad song to listen to when depressed.......

~Sasha

what she said :)
*huggies his sashie and puts Insashiable on*

Muse, that poem was absolutly beautiful. It felt as if I were there and gave me the first sence of hope that I have had in a very long time. A hope that might actually be something worth living to see out there. I hope to see more soon.

*Kat*

nice gong muse *pats back* told you there's awesome things left to feel kat :) hell, neither men or muse have felt that yet either hahaha

I knew there was stuff worth living for, but I didn't think there was HOPE in finding it, that poem proved it possible.
*Kat*

Thanks Kat.
I am glad that you liked it, as it was a type of poem I never even thought of writing until very recently. The only real gift I can give you through my poetry is hope and happiness so I am thrilled with your response.

*pats his head*
good boy musey

you are so dead next time i see you on the board but not on msn

Your words are always appreciated Lady Astarael
Just out of curiosity though how did you come up with your nic? As Astarael is not a common name it does spark interest.

because sasha is too good to be true, her nick was naturally taken from a fantasy novel *hopes he remembers correctly and isn't gonna get bitch-slapped* :rolleyes: :devilflip: :devilflip:

Andreas if you don't see me on MSN take that as a hint .... :P

haha bich-slapped by you DE ... you know that adds a whole new perspective to you. ;)

haha bich-slapped by you DE ... you know that adds a whole new perspective to you. ;)

Yes my name was the same of a being who along with others created the charter which was a form of magic and all who heard Astarael's voice were banished to the river of death... i thought it beffiting...

a**hole :devilflip: :devilflip:



haha double-posting to increase your count... you know that adds a whole new perspective to you. :devilflip:

huh? *confused*
Ok that was the last time I am was using fast reply!

Muse you need to download aim.. you can block andreas but still talk to me ;p