Here are some of the poems i wrote when i was bored... some lines suck cuz i dont exactly noe wut to write... anwyays if u have any suggestions to make it better, id be happy to hear it :)
Plastic Doll
Pale, round eyes so icy cold
Death hard stare that forever hold
The color drained from her once cream skin
There’s nothing left deep within
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
Frail, thin body, never been fed
Her heart is lifeless, long, and dead
Her rosy lips has long been gone
Always hiding after dawn
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
Never once been bathed in light
Just from darkness in the night
Beauty she had not inside
Her life seemed pushed right aside
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
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sounds more like a song then a poem.. but it's beautifull nonetheless..
Narti
Narti
thank u 
i've always tried writing song lyrics but i cant really get a beat onto it so i kinda gave up on that idea ^_^
i started enjoy writing poems ever since my teacher made me do some for hw :P lol
i've always tried writing song lyrics but i cant really get a beat onto it so i kinda gave up on that idea ^_^i started enjoy writing poems ever since my teacher made me do some for hw :P lol
heres another poem i wrote.... i kinda need an ending though cuz this ending isnt that great...
Suicide Turned To Homicide
She said her life was horrible
She said there was nothing left inside
She said that if she had a knife
She would probably commit suicide
She said that no one loved her
And that she really had no friends
She said, “I can’t suffer this pain any longer
I must make this all end”
She said the day had come
Tomorrow she’d be gone
She said she’d no longer suffer
Once it reaches dawn
As night arrives, she trembles
As she holds the knife
Alone in her room she cries
‘Cause she could not end her life
As I stare through the windows
I wonder when she’ll go
Because I can’t take this anymore
As I linger in the shadow
I knew she had no guts
She just wanted all the attention
So I quietly sneak into her room
So I can end all of this tension
As I stand behind her
I hear her drop the blade
So I pick it up with care
As she says, “I was not afraid”
“If you had the guts,” I say
“By now you would’ve been dead”
“I just needed a better knife,” she whispers
“A sharper one instead”
“This one is perfect,” I smile
While staring at the knife
“Let me show you the real way
Of how to end your life”
the beat is kinda mess up though...
i was inspired to write this poem because alot of ppl i noe r looking for attention by saying they wanna kill themselves cuz they want ppl to say "awww its ok we still love u! "dont kill urself ur my friend!" i think its really pathetic
Suicide Turned To Homicide
She said her life was horrible
She said there was nothing left inside
She said that if she had a knife
She would probably commit suicide
She said that no one loved her
And that she really had no friends
She said, “I can’t suffer this pain any longer
I must make this all end”
She said the day had come
Tomorrow she’d be gone
She said she’d no longer suffer
Once it reaches dawn
As night arrives, she trembles
As she holds the knife
Alone in her room she cries
‘Cause she could not end her life
As I stare through the windows
I wonder when she’ll go
Because I can’t take this anymore
As I linger in the shadow
I knew she had no guts
She just wanted all the attention
So I quietly sneak into her room
So I can end all of this tension
As I stand behind her
I hear her drop the blade
So I pick it up with care
As she says, “I was not afraid”
“If you had the guts,” I say
“By now you would’ve been dead”
“I just needed a better knife,” she whispers
“A sharper one instead”
“This one is perfect,” I smile
While staring at the knife
“Let me show you the real way
Of how to end your life”
the beat is kinda mess up though...
i was inspired to write this poem because alot of ppl i noe r looking for attention by saying they wanna kill themselves cuz they want ppl to say "awww its ok we still love u! "dont kill urself ur my friend!" i think its really pathetic
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thank u i've always tried writing song lyrics but i cant really get a beat onto it so i kinda gave up on that idea
i started enjoy writing poems ever since my teacher made me do some for hw lol
i started enjoy writing poems ever since my teacher made me do some for hw lol
oh don't give up... looks to me like your doing a great job of it. I could never do it. Altho I have tried.. and still do.. just really sux at it..
you should post more.. I'm intrested in what other poems you have to dazzel me with.
this one im not that proud of... but o well 
Vampires
White nails with clothes so black
Navy blue cape covering their back
Sharp fangs so pearly white
On your neck, they would bite
Drinking blood just to survive
Nothing else would keep them alive
In the dark, they would fly
When the sun comes up, there life would die
People would chase them with sticks on fire
Bats would fly up, higher and higher
But it’s too late, the humans are here
They kill the bats and send out fear
Down, down, they start to fall
On the ground, they began to crawl
But now the sun has start to rise
From below you hear their cries
Slowly burning out like fire
These dark creatures called Vampires
again, if any suggestions to make this poem better (i noe i can make it better... im just not sure wut to do about it...) speak speak speak :)
Vampires
White nails with clothes so black
Navy blue cape covering their back
Sharp fangs so pearly white
On your neck, they would bite
Drinking blood just to survive
Nothing else would keep them alive
In the dark, they would fly
When the sun comes up, there life would die
People would chase them with sticks on fire
Bats would fly up, higher and higher
But it’s too late, the humans are here
They kill the bats and send out fear
Down, down, they start to fall
On the ground, they began to crawl
But now the sun has start to rise
From below you hear their cries
Slowly burning out like fire
These dark creatures called Vampires
again, if any suggestions to make this poem better (i noe i can make it better... im just not sure wut to do about it...) speak speak speak :)
QUOTE
heres another poem i wrote.... i kinda need an ending though cuz this ending isnt that great...
Suicide Turned To Homicide
She said her life was horrible
She said there was nothing left inside
She said that if she had a knife
She would probably commit suicide
She said that no one loved her
And that she really had no friends
She said, “I can’t suffer this pain any longer
I must make this all end”
She said the day had come
Tomorrow she’d be gone
She said she’d no longer suffer
Once it reaches dawn
As night arrives, she trembles
As she holds the knife
Alone in her room she cries
‘Cause she could not end her life
As I stare through the windows
I wonder when she’ll go
Because I can’t take this anymore
As I linger in the shadow
I knew she had no guts
She just wanted all the attention
So I quietly sneak into her room
So I can end all of this tension
As I stand behind her
I hear her drop the blade
So I pick it up with care
As she says, “I was not afraid”
“If you had the guts,” I say
“By now you would’ve been dead”
“I just needed a better knife,” she whispers
“A sharper one instead”
“This one is perfect,” I smile
While staring at the knife
“Let me show you the real way
Of how to end your life”
the beat is kinda mess up though...
i was inspired to write this poem because alot of ppl i noe r looking for attention by saying they wanna kill themselves cuz they want ppl to say "awww its ok we still love u! "dont kill urself ur my friend!" i think its really pathetic
Suicide Turned To Homicide
She said her life was horrible
She said there was nothing left inside
She said that if she had a knife
She would probably commit suicide
She said that no one loved her
And that she really had no friends
She said, “I can’t suffer this pain any longer
I must make this all end”
She said the day had come
Tomorrow she’d be gone
She said she’d no longer suffer
Once it reaches dawn
As night arrives, she trembles
As she holds the knife
Alone in her room she cries
‘Cause she could not end her life
As I stare through the windows
I wonder when she’ll go
Because I can’t take this anymore
As I linger in the shadow
I knew she had no guts
She just wanted all the attention
So I quietly sneak into her room
So I can end all of this tension
As I stand behind her
I hear her drop the blade
So I pick it up with care
As she says, “I was not afraid”
“If you had the guts,” I say
“By now you would’ve been dead”
“I just needed a better knife,” she whispers
“A sharper one instead”
“This one is perfect,” I smile
While staring at the knife
“Let me show you the real way
Of how to end your life”
the beat is kinda mess up though...
i was inspired to write this poem because alot of ppl i noe r looking for attention by saying they wanna kill themselves cuz they want ppl to say "awww its ok we still love u! "dont kill urself ur my friend!" i think its really pathetic
can't say anything their.. I'm one of thoes who is slightly suicidal.. but I don't tell the world.. or at least.. I don't think I do.. mmmmmmmm... I do have to say you open my eyes.. makes me think a lot.. about my self imparticulay... you're very convincing in your words.. and very direct.. I like your unique style...
Welcome to the Forum :) hope you enjoy your stay with us.. and remember we ar eall your friends
*whispers* and so is satan, you gotta love him..lol
your poems are greatr.. and ive tried to write lyrics too but i jus suck at it lol stop by my thread theres one..
the poem suicide turned to homicide i really like
and ur inspiration is so true
attention freaks sayin they wanna kill themselves lol
grea job:)
*whispers* and so is satan, you gotta love him..lol
your poems are greatr.. and ive tried to write lyrics too but i jus suck at it lol stop by my thread theres one..
the poem suicide turned to homicide i really like
and ur inspiration is so true
attention freaks sayin they wanna kill themselves lol
grea job:)
awww u guys bring my spirits up! i'd write more of my old ones but the feelings i had when i wrote my older ones have long passed so i dont feel like posting them... i kinda lost them anwyays :P
i'd write more of my old ones but the feelings i had when i wrote my older ones have long passed so i dont feel like posting them... i kinda lost them anwyays :P
well do what I do... or not.. If at first you DON"T kNow how.. make something up.. believe me.. if ppl don't know the orginal their'll never know the diffrence..
hehe ya ur right Narti i do the same. at times *whistles* :P
if i can ever find it... i didnt write them in ntoebooks so i dont noe where they are now :P
ummm this is some random poem i jsut did two seconds ago cuz i was bored. maybe its cuz i'm feeling... soemthing i dont want to o.O
Oh my love
Had u been sent
From above?
Oh my soul
Had you been steered
Out of control?
Oh my heart
Had you been broken
From the start?
Oh my mind
Had you been stolen
From mankind?
Oh my love
Had you been sent
From above?
ummm this is some random poem i jsut did two seconds ago cuz i was bored. maybe its cuz i'm feeling... soemthing i dont want to o.O
Oh my love
Had u been sent
From above?
Oh my soul
Had you been steered
Out of control?
Oh my heart
Had you been broken
From the start?
Oh my mind
Had you been stolen
From mankind?
Oh my love
Had you been sent
From above?
i can really relate to this poem
not a lot of words but a lot of meaning to it very deep
great job :)
not a lot of words but a lot of meaning to it very deep
great job :)
thanx! i read urs and narti's poems on ur own little sections :P they were good ;) i jsut didnt put them up cuz u guys had alot of pages lol
lol thanks :)
boy the first one was very good!
i have writting somthing like that once.
called..dolly.
Vampires...was awsome!
nice ryming!
very dark and cool..not silly sounding
like i wouldve made it.
and i like the one where,
she was going to kill herself,
then it all turned arround into the
oppisite of whats to come...very good!
lots better than I.
i have writting somthing like that once.
called..dolly.
Vampires...was awsome!
nice ryming!
very dark and cool..not silly sounding
like i wouldve made it.
and i like the one where,
she was going to kill herself,
then it all turned arround into the
oppisite of whats to come...very good!
lots better than I.
Why thankies blackdragon
i liked ur poems alot... they were awesome!!! (and i aint jsut sayin it :rolleyes:) i think i commented something on urs already ^ _ ^
well whenever i have time i'll try to write more but i have exams to study for ( im only in grade 7 and i already have exams!! :o )
yah i usually write about that kind of stuff all the time... my best friend thinks wut i write about is stupid and that it should be "happier" poems -_-
i liked ur poems alot... they were awesome!!! (and i aint jsut sayin it :rolleyes:) i think i commented something on urs already ^ _ ^
well whenever i have time i'll try to write more but i have exams to study for ( im only in grade 7 and i already have exams!! :o )
yah i usually write about that kind of stuff all the time... my best friend thinks wut i write about is stupid and that it should be "happier" poems -_-
eeekk who want happy poems...heehee,
naa well sometimes happy is good...
but i like darkn and depressed stuff.
naa well sometimes happy is good...
but i like darkn and depressed stuff.
sorry so many ppl so little time.. *kissy kissy*
narti didn't forget her angle.. hehe
thanks for reading my stuff. yeah I know theirs a LOT!!! hehe but Oh well.. I always repeat poems when i'm dry so no one is the wiser.. hehehe
narti didn't forget her angle.. hehe
thanks for reading my stuff. yeah I know theirs a LOT!!! hehe but Oh well.. I always repeat poems when i'm dry so no one is the wiser.. hehehe
QUOTE (NocturnalAngel @ Jun 5 2004, 10:35 AM)
Here are some of the poems i wrote when i was bored... some lines suck cuz i dont exactly noe wut to write... anwyays if u have any suggestions to make it better, id be happy to hear it :)
Plastic Doll
Pale, round eyes so icy cold
Death hard stare that forever hold
The color drained from her once cream skin
There’s nothing left deep within
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
Frail, thin body, never been fed
Her heart is lifeless, long, and dead
Her rosy lips has long been gone
Always hiding after dawn
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
Never once been bathed in light
Just from darkness in the night
Beauty she had not inside
Her life seemed pushed right aside
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
Plastic Doll
Pale, round eyes so icy cold
Death hard stare that forever hold
The color drained from her once cream skin
There’s nothing left deep within
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
Frail, thin body, never been fed
Her heart is lifeless, long, and dead
Her rosy lips has long been gone
Always hiding after dawn
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
Never once been bathed in light
Just from darkness in the night
Beauty she had not inside
Her life seemed pushed right aside
A plastic doll just for display
Her heart has started to decay
Never had she once been seen
As a human and not machine
GORGEOUS love...allow me the honor to use this poem for one of my manga projects..of course you shall recieve the credit...its only fair... ^_^
*SUPERFLYINGTACKLEPOUNCE* HEYLO ALL!!! :D mesa likes your poems much too much!!! thanx for reading my stuff but you're better... I MEAN IT!!!!!
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I didn't know you did manga, Donovan :ph34r: I'd really like to see some of your pieces.. bet they're fabulous
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I didn't know you did manga, Donovan :ph34r: I'd really like to see some of your pieces.. bet they're fabulous
thank u guys 
or course u may use it ^_^ i'd like to see some of ur mangas too donovan :)
or course u may use it ^_^ i'd like to see some of ur mangas too donovan :)
NocturnalAngel
Your Poems Are wonderful you are very talented with your writing Capabilities i would love to read more of your poems!
Your Poems Are wonderful you are very talented with your writing Capabilities i would love to read more of your poems!
your poems are trully wonderful love them :) u have awesome talent
QUOTE (NocturnalAngel @ Jun 7 2004, 05:06 PM)
thank u guys or course u may use it ^_^ i'd like to see some of ur mangas too donovan :)
or course u may use it ^_^ i'd like to see some of ur mangas too donovan :)Sure..when I have the time to post them and stuff....
omg!! i LOVE your poem Plastic Doll!! It's amzing *claps hands*, i like all your other poems but this one is my favourite!!!!!!!!!! post more!! post more. . .
YES YES YES!!! post more stuff!!! :D
your poems are great post more!!!
FUCKIN EH
Right On
FUCKIN EH
Right On
I'd love too.... but it takes me a while to make one up :P i'm slow at thses stuff... well whenever i have time ^_^
thanz guys (plastic doll is my favourite too ^ _ ^)
NocturnalAngel
thanz guys
(plastic doll is my favourite too ^ _ ^)NocturnalAngel
*Sits ona chair, crosses legs, and waits for more poems*
dont wory hunny i have all the time in da world
dont wory hunny i have all the time in da world
Well it doesn't matter if ur slow..as long as it produces somemthing good...
yes my "exams" r finally over (grade 7 and they make us actually take those??? 
) even though i still haveta go to school after....
anyways, sorry to dissapoint u guys cuz this poem sucks :P ah well i wrote it during class so ya cant blame me ^ _ ^
Each morning you wake up unknowingly
To what's going to happen that day
You go to the washroom and do your stuff
then to your siblings you fray
You walk to the kitchen for breakfast
Looking in the half-empty cabinet
You grabbed the carton of milk
And made your cereal wet
But you noticed you were late for school
So off your ran to the bus
As you entered your school, the torture chamber
You look at some people with disgust
Down the hallway you ran
Into your History class
The teacher hands back your test
As you sighed with relief cuz you passed
After the day had ended
You deicded to walk back home
You see your major scrush
So you brush your hair with a comb
After you conversation ended
And your crush was gonna give you a call
You happily skipped all the way home
And later went to the mall
At 2 u sneaked into your room
Coming back from a party at a friend's
You fell into a heavy sleep
So this time you didn't haveta pretend
That morning you woke up unknowingly
To what's gonna happen that day
And it might jsut be the last morning
That you may wake up to play
Live Life Like You Aint Got Another Day
Cuz you May Never Know When Your Last Day Is
yah... it sucked... i'll make some mnore later.... well its time for me to retire for tonight *yawns* -_- nighty night sleepy heads
) even though i still haveta go to school after....anyways, sorry to dissapoint u guys cuz this poem sucks :P ah well i wrote it during class so ya cant blame me ^ _ ^
Each morning you wake up unknowingly
To what's going to happen that day
You go to the washroom and do your stuff
then to your siblings you fray
You walk to the kitchen for breakfast
Looking in the half-empty cabinet
You grabbed the carton of milk
And made your cereal wet
But you noticed you were late for school
So off your ran to the bus
As you entered your school, the torture chamber
You look at some people with disgust
Down the hallway you ran
Into your History class
The teacher hands back your test
As you sighed with relief cuz you passed
After the day had ended
You deicded to walk back home
You see your major scrush
So you brush your hair with a comb
After you conversation ended
And your crush was gonna give you a call
You happily skipped all the way home
And later went to the mall
At 2 u sneaked into your room
Coming back from a party at a friend's
You fell into a heavy sleep
So this time you didn't haveta pretend
That morning you woke up unknowingly
To what's gonna happen that day
And it might jsut be the last morning
That you may wake up to play
Live Life Like You Aint Got Another Day
Cuz you May Never Know When Your Last Day Is
yah... it sucked... i'll make some mnore later.... well its time for me to retire for tonight *yawns* -_- nighty night sleepy heads
just one random question first b4 i leave: :help: how do u check someone's profile? do i click their names? cuz when i do, it said that i do not have access to this feature or something and that also happens when i click other stuff... and how do u pm people? :imu:
i had the same problem but now i can look at them so maybe they fixed it. idk. any way i like your writing!! keep it upand post more pleazz
keep it upand post more pleazz
nothing sucks...your works are very creative.
great job!
great job!
hi there...so how have u been? ur recent poem was good...it didn't such althought a bit sloppy but hey...its still good....
blackdragon: *huggles*
hey donovan, i've been soooo busy. we're hopefully gnnna move out of this crummy neighborhood soon so were getting everything cleaned up and organized and stuff.
anyways, here's another one i wrote when i was looking at the clouds and somehow i saw fairy tale characters.... o.O
this is quite long.... The rhythm is really messed up though....
A knight was defending his castle
From an atrocious, evil dragon
While a princess was waiting for her rescuer
Next to her exquisite run-away wagon
The knight swung his sword
And the dragon fell to his feet
He jumped into the wagon
Without ever missing a beat
But then something evil appeared
It was a senile, old witch
She quickly burned them to their deaths
Without a single twitch
The wind suddenly blew
Too hard for her to escape
It quickly passed onto the next town
But away went the witch's cape
She quickly grabbed her broomstick
And off she flew away
Chasing afer her belonging
Like she had no other day
But then into a wall she crashed
With now an injured leg
"Oh no" cried Humpty Dumpty
The gawky, big round egg
He fell off from the wall
Landing on a little head
"Ewww how disgusting,"
Cried the little girl in red
She was on her way to Granny's
This little Red Riding Hood
She started picking flowers
While walking through the woods
But then she met a wolf
Who was black, gray, and brown
He had gobbled up old Granny
And is chasing little red around
He then ran into a door
That seemed to jsut appear
He accidentally sneezed
And made the pig jump up with fear
The hosue of hay was way too weak
So down the fragile thing fell
The wolf jsut ate his dinner
But he shrugged and said, "oh well"
He started chowing down the pig
As quietly as he could
But then he heard a giant's roar
and ran back to the woods
The giant was climbing down a beanstalk
Chasing after a boy named Jack
But Jack reached the bottom first
And to the beanstalk he whacked
The beanstalk fell right down
Into a peaceful pond
It startled a big green frog
And also a little blonde
This made the princess lose balance
And she dropped her golden ball
Quickly the frog jumped in
Splashing her and all
It retreived the golden ball
And politely handed it to her
"how can i repay u?
Home, money, whichever you prefer"
"I do not need much
But the home will be fine"
Alright, let's go" said the princess
"i'm glad u didn't decline"
But then a pumpkin-shaped carriage
started steering out of control
It passed the frog and princess
But ran into a pole
The carriaged crashed to many pieces
shattering on the ground
Out came an ordinary girl
Wearing an ugly dress and a frown
She started to cry and cry
As other things were coming out
"everything's ok Cinderella,"
A little mouse said with doubt
but then a beast came along
And offered to bring her home
"I have extra clothes, money
And a seat to the throne"
Cinderella politely accepted
As the beast let out a hand
She grabbed it as he helped her up
now following his every command
Five months later
The beast had proposed
He wanted to marry his one true love
So he would not wilt his rose
At their wedding, everything was perfect
The music, the atmosphere, and the bouquet
After that they all lived happily ever after...
or did they?
hehe the ending was gay... i had to make up half of the thing on the way...
hey donovan, i've been soooo busy. we're hopefully gnnna move out of this crummy neighborhood soon so were getting everything cleaned up and organized and stuff.
anyways, here's another one i wrote when i was looking at the clouds and somehow i saw fairy tale characters.... o.O
this is quite long.... The rhythm is really messed up though....
A knight was defending his castle
From an atrocious, evil dragon
While a princess was waiting for her rescuer
Next to her exquisite run-away wagon
The knight swung his sword
And the dragon fell to his feet
He jumped into the wagon
Without ever missing a beat
But then something evil appeared
It was a senile, old witch
She quickly burned them to their deaths
Without a single twitch
The wind suddenly blew
Too hard for her to escape
It quickly passed onto the next town
But away went the witch's cape
She quickly grabbed her broomstick
And off she flew away
Chasing afer her belonging
Like she had no other day
But then into a wall she crashed
With now an injured leg
"Oh no" cried Humpty Dumpty
The gawky, big round egg
He fell off from the wall
Landing on a little head
"Ewww how disgusting,"
Cried the little girl in red
She was on her way to Granny's
This little Red Riding Hood
She started picking flowers
While walking through the woods
But then she met a wolf
Who was black, gray, and brown
He had gobbled up old Granny
And is chasing little red around
He then ran into a door
That seemed to jsut appear
He accidentally sneezed
And made the pig jump up with fear
The hosue of hay was way too weak
So down the fragile thing fell
The wolf jsut ate his dinner
But he shrugged and said, "oh well"
He started chowing down the pig
As quietly as he could
But then he heard a giant's roar
and ran back to the woods
The giant was climbing down a beanstalk
Chasing after a boy named Jack
But Jack reached the bottom first
And to the beanstalk he whacked
The beanstalk fell right down
Into a peaceful pond
It startled a big green frog
And also a little blonde
This made the princess lose balance
And she dropped her golden ball
Quickly the frog jumped in
Splashing her and all
It retreived the golden ball
And politely handed it to her
"how can i repay u?
Home, money, whichever you prefer"
"I do not need much
But the home will be fine"
Alright, let's go" said the princess
"i'm glad u didn't decline"
But then a pumpkin-shaped carriage
started steering out of control
It passed the frog and princess
But ran into a pole
The carriaged crashed to many pieces
shattering on the ground
Out came an ordinary girl
Wearing an ugly dress and a frown
She started to cry and cry
As other things were coming out
"everything's ok Cinderella,"
A little mouse said with doubt
but then a beast came along
And offered to bring her home
"I have extra clothes, money
And a seat to the throne"
Cinderella politely accepted
As the beast let out a hand
She grabbed it as he helped her up
now following his every command
Five months later
The beast had proposed
He wanted to marry his one true love
So he would not wilt his rose
At their wedding, everything was perfect
The music, the atmosphere, and the bouquet
After that they all lived happily ever after...
or did they?
hehe the ending was gay... i had to make up half of the thing on the way...
pheuf that took so long -_- one whole hour.... well it woulda been half an hour if i didn't haveta get the clothes from outside and cover the bunny cage from the rain and get some stuff dowstairs yadda yada....
it doesnt really have a message or anything inside it... jsut something i wanted to do cuz i was bored ^_^
it doesnt really have a message or anything inside it... jsut something i wanted to do cuz i was bored ^_^
Your poems are unique I like it...you tell a story in each one which is really creative..you can expand...ellaborate and make a good story...
heya, angel!!! nice works!!! really like them ^_^
o yah and btw, thanx for letting me use ur poems for my presentation SS ;)
ARE YOU KIDDING?!?!?!?! i was HONORED to be presented in a skool fullof a bunch of people i don't know!!!! :D... and i mean it... YOU'RE REALLY GOOD!!!! *huggles and kisses forehead*
*huggles and kisses forehead*
Waiting for more poems dear.... :cofpap: ....
ok ok donovan.... i have been quite busy (but keeping on asking me makes me write more... thanks ^ _ ^)... today was our "groovy" 60's poetry stuff... it was "totally awesome dude" :devilflip: hehehe well anwyays... i went to my friends hosue after school cuz it was raining and we kinda had the same little arguement we always do about religion and i started asking her questions that she couldn't answer and so she finally went and grabbed out her bible... then she read it to me.... o.O anyways, i wasn't listening to her reading one bit and so i kinda wrote this poem.... it probably doesn't even make sense but o well, when i read it to her... she was kinda mad at me.... :D yay! lol
Believe It Or Not
You must believe
You must believe the book
You must follow
You must follow the book
You must worship
You must worship the book
You must believe
You must believe God
You must follow
You msut follow God
You must worship
You must worship God
You must believe
Believe everything the book says
You must believe
Believe everything God says
You must believe
Believe or go to Hell
But...
You don't have to believe in the Devil
You don't have to follow the Devil
You don't have to worship the Devil
So... that is why I prefer to go to Hell
yah it stinks doesnt it.. ^ _ ^ o well wutever.... its really repetative though...
Yah just to let u noe if this doesn't make sense to u... i dont believe in God.... but i also don't believe in the Devil becuase if u believe in god u haveta believe in the Devil too... right?? i dunno im clueless noe.... just confusing myself -_- .... i'll stop talking now... o.O
Believe It Or Not
You must believe
You must believe the book
You must follow
You must follow the book
You must worship
You must worship the book
You must believe
You must believe God
You must follow
You msut follow God
You must worship
You must worship God
You must believe
Believe everything the book says
You must believe
Believe everything God says
You must believe
Believe or go to Hell
But...
You don't have to believe in the Devil
You don't have to follow the Devil
You don't have to worship the Devil
So... that is why I prefer to go to Hell
yah it stinks doesnt it.. ^ _ ^ o well wutever.... its really repetative though...
Yah just to let u noe if this doesn't make sense to u... i dont believe in God.... but i also don't believe in the Devil becuase if u believe in god u haveta believe in the Devil too... right?? i dunno im clueless noe.... just confusing myself -_- .... i'll stop talking now... o.O
QUOTE (SerenitySerpent @ Jun 15 2004, 09:25 PM)
ARE YOU KIDDING?!?!?!?! i was HONORED to be presented in a skool fullof a bunch of people i don't know!!!! :D... and i mean it... YOU'RE REALLY GOOD!!!! *huggles and kisses forehead*
*huggles and kisses forehead* *gives her big hug* it was easier to present other ppl's poem in front of ppl than saying my own... i dunno why... anyways, it went great (usually when i say my own, i shake a bit... even though i aint nervous...) i said ur poems and a song lyric by slipknot :D so i didn't shake one bit ^ _ ^
congratulations!!!
I hope you get 100 or else that teacher is gonna get a whoopin! :D
I hope you get 100 or else that teacher is gonna get a whoopin! :D
lol :lol:
its uhh..different your poem... :ph34r:
its not as good as the last one you wrote but its still kinda good... keep it up! I'M ROOTIN FOR YAH BABY!!!!!
I'M ROOTIN FOR YAH BABY!!!!!
thanx u guys... umm i dunt really wanna close this thread but i might not be on for a while... i noe its the summer and im supposed to have MORE time not LESS time to do stuff but i'm gonna be busy doing some... stuff... but sometimes i might wanna come on to write some stuff down when i feel stressed... so umm the next time u might see may be in august... or tommorrow... we'll see....
but thanx for ur support and everything everybody!
but thanx for ur support and everything everybody!
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