Well i started my last thread with this poem and it turned out well so for luck and old time's sake i think i begin it the same way

Silent Transformation

Residing alone in the deepest of nights
Reminiscing on all life could have been
Yet has become instead
Shadows creep across unsuspecting mind
Light fades from view as hope is lost
Life pours out into these thoughts
Heart rips open and fear explodes
Hate pulses through long dead viens
From torment past endured
Never ending cycle of sorrow and despair
No key exists, lost never to be found
Darkness reigns within a soul condemned
Unseen captor, merciless and predatory
Eyes enshrouded, kept from the truth
Voices screaming inside, willing to break free
Whispers speak of unbearable torture
Fighting to keep dreams alive
Clandestine thoughts seep through
Lost to all once greatly freared
Left soulless and empty within demonic shell


I am starting a new thread and i thought it would be a good idea to re-post some of the poems from my old thread that i liked but unfortunately that list has grown long....This way at least more people can see some of my better works while i have more time to write new ones which i am in the process of at this minute. So i hope you like it and that i am not being a nuisance by doing so. Anyway i hope everyone enjoys....*~*~*~im back~*~*~*

~Sasha

Stalking Shadow

Wind whistling through the trees
Old limbs start to move and creak
The forest comes alive

Moonlight shining overhead
Sending shadows across the leafy floor
The forest comes alive

Breath of nature rises and swirls the leaves
Enveloping its prey in a whirlwind of color
The forest comes alive

Frantic eyes look left and right
As shadows slink beyond one's vision
The forest comes alive

Rustling bushes and snapping twigs
Haunt lurks behind the trees
The forest comes alive

Turn and run from the stalking shadow
Claw wood fingers reach for their bounty
The forest comes alive

Leaping faster in desperation
Distant voices cry out at pounding heart
The forest comes alive

Ancient roots halt the rushing fear
Falling to meat cold grassy grave
The forest comes alive

Taking their prisoner justly won
Captured in willowy darkness evermore
The forest comes alive

Guilty

Blood drops from my fingers
Pain streaks across regretful face
Chill takes hold as body succumbs to shivers

All the daggers through your heart driven
The lashes and scars still evident on your frail form
For my brutality can i ever be forgiven

As your alabaster skin loses every trace of pallor
Blank glassy eyes of the defenseless, empty to the living world
To turn away from the image of my suffering i have not the valor

My true love tell me what has happened
To the single ray of hope in my mangled life
Only now that you are gone do i realize how much on you i depend

How to the only person that i adore, could i have done this
Why were those words of hate and ambivalence ever said
What i would not give for the feel of your soft kiss

Did our tragedy really have to end this way
My abuse finally drove you past the edge
To take it all back there is so much that i would say

But nothing could pardon my torture
Of your weak and vulnerable soul
Your body now resting in eternal shallow fissure

No hope for my penance or redemption
Less of a chance for the return of your lost spirit
laying down in your earthly grave joining in deserved desecration

As the lid closes over my crying face
I take comfort in the fact that i will never leave your side
I will protect you and be faithful for my disgrace

Dirt pounding down upon the coffin door
Burying the damned darklings to our inevitable hell
Our secrets of cataclysmic despondence forgotten evermore

Pandora's Box

From its prison hell's released
Demons fly among the mortal
Fear and torment travel free
Evil passes through the portal

Death weaves through the living
Crimson fiends of hate and lies
Leaving despair in their wake
Course unseen across the skies

Paradise serene no longer
Straying far from what has been
Spirits of rage and vengeance
Make it a crumbling world of sin

In the darkness they did linger
Forever longing to return
What can motivate their horror
No sane mind can discern

Independent is this evil
From its everlasting capture
Corrupting this world
Until the time of its rapture

Untold powers have escaped
Trap opened by unknowing captor
Portal shut tight but far too late
Leaving only hope of laughter

Slip Away

Opening your eyes, all you see is pitch-blackness
Searching for a wall but finding none
Groping in the darkness for the floor but it isn't there
Wondering what now supports you
Plummeting stomach and pounding heart, you begin to fall
Hands flailing for something to hold onto, but meeting only air
Knowing the world once known is now gone
All once held dear, disappearing into shadow
Left with only terror to hold onto for comfort
Acknowledging that even fear will fade
Losing sight of your own survival
Disintegrating memories, forgetting even your own name
A shell is all that remains, a semblance of life
The floor returns beneath you, relief courses through
Sinking down to meet its cold embrace
A sigh escapes from tortured lungs
Reclaiming an identity surely lost
Though it all seems unimportant now
Only the emptiness remains inside
Cold sorrow spreading as all you were, dying
Letting yourself slip away....


This is the last poem i am going to post for now because it is 3:30 a.m. and no one is on so it doesn't matter. These are a lot of my older works that i am really fond of and i will be back to post more tomorrow

bopyah! :devilflip:
i like, i like !!! :popcorn:

Thank you for your comment, it is greatly appreciated

You're poems are great.

But why did you close your other thread?

oooooo sasha's on the spot.. *narti sits in a chair with sasha in her lap.. gently petting her fur* don't answer .. sasha.. unless you want to.. Don't feel threaten.. *looks at ummei* yeah to what ever.. ummei's nice.. I like her...
anywho..
*walks over to sasha with the small being in her hand*
nice to see you back...
luv you,
~narti & her long eared lovely~

My other thread became too cluttered, i had two pages of just spam because i didn't have any of my poems with me to post. There was also past there which i hoped to put behind me....
*sasha petting the other sasha* pretty bunnyyyy *feeds it to snake* mwahahha

sorry....i love the bunny...It is nice to see you again Sondi my sweet

MORE POETRY FOR SHARDSIE!
Haha :)
Glad to see you made a new thread Now I can admire your lovely words You are one of the greatest writers I've ever seen on this site, and the first person here to befriend me..SASHA IS THE BEST!!

Shardsie

Luv ya too Shardsie....and we both started our new threads together. Friends are the best

I've always thought of these two poems as a pair so i will post them together

Infected

Hidden inside
Coursing through my veins
Poison changing me from within
Trying to fight the madness
But losing in the end
No antidote for my disease
No remedy for internal pain
Haunted by the memory your face brings
Tainted, you're underneath my skin
Battling to preserve myself
But losing in the end...



Trapped

Held captive by the memories
Brought forth by the sight of your face
Chained by the sound of your voice
I'm so tired of being imprisoned
Captured by the life you left behind
Unending is this darkness
Cloaked in sorrow and reverie
The shadows of my forsaken heart
Locked away by thoughts of you
Consuming the torn pieces of my mind
Times long past, still just as sweet
Brought back to harsh reality
Those dreams are long passed
Left is the vision you've condemned

This is one of my favorites...about my best friend Chelsea

Not to say that you aren't one of my best friends Shards for you mean so much to me


Forsaken

Shadowed heart, exiled beneath the dark rolling sky
No heed is taken as the years slip by
Immortal life, a gift that is truly bittersweet
Of hope and salvation, temptation did cheat

Barren wasteland of dense rocky formation
Sanity seeping slowly away, cursing very creation
Alone on the peak of damnation, the lifeless tree of memory
Losing one's self in the twisted torture and reverie

Black droplets of sadness fall from heaven's face
Shining tears intertwined, reminders of an angel's fall from grace
Empty eyes seek solace in the vast expanse above
What was once taken for granted, now forsaken of god's love

Tale of Desperation ((inspired by Lacey aka AsylumofElegy))

Gliding slowly past unseen
Embodiment of shadows
Ghost of the world today
No one can see the lost soul
And no one really cares
Caught in evil web
Spun in threads of unending despair

Being captured with blue eyes
Vision of deliverance
Plays at peripheral sight
Longing for the angel
Who sings of pure sadness
And proves to be companion
Through the lonely, darkened nights

Whispers dance around dying ears
Toying with a mind on the brink
Very edge of total insanity
Sweet voice of harsh command
Reverberates through emptiness within
Crashing against walls of self control
Battering ram to seize its pawn

Hate slips slowly through
Filling clandestine thoughts
Blinding innocent view
Presence of another
Alien to life's cold reality
Yet locked inside
Unwilling to break it free

Chains of binding cannot be broken
Connection refuses to be severed
For dependance has grown
On the spirit who understands
The only one who would not turn away
If they knew the truth
That lies behind blank staring eyes

But it has become ever harder
To know the difference
Between daydream and reality
Fantasy takes over crumbling existance
Bending gradually to iron will
No matter the effort it cannot be escaped
So relinquished is a broken heart

Torment never seems to end
Enshrouded in endless sorrow
Staring out into the world surrounding
Yet having no solitude or haven to belong
Astral planes of false hope
House the pain that morning brings
In each daunting and despondent day

"You are not real and nothing is before my eyes"
Cries a wandering form of the condemned
Oh but i do exist and i watch you on this night
Waiting for the time when it is best to strike
You are not real my sweet precious
For no one even remembers your name
And if you were to disappear, surely no one would miss

All you ever wanted was to be alone
And here the chance has been given
To choose your destiny and lingering fate
Or waste away in prolonging years
Agonizing choices my dear
But you must decide soon
For time runs short as the sun slowly rises

Come with me or rot away
In the prison which is called a life
You are being withheld in jail unsensed
But you can feel it every day
Like a touch to your subconcious
Captive within your eternal thoughts
And society's rules to blame

Carry you to dream land
Where your heart can forever be free
Break from the continuing madness
That consumes your wakeful state
You have no wisdom in the matter
My unwitting slave of night
This is where the journey ends
For the fading form of a possesed soul




*~*~YAY~*~*~ something new lol. Sorry it is kind of longish and may not completely make sense but i threw it together rather quickly, an epiphany of sorts it just came to me after reading Lacey's story which is magnificent by the way and anyone who hasn't read it should do so

I dont understand all of it.
:) But I like it anyway

I wore afraid you wouldnt write anymore when you closed the other thread...

-vampy

I could never quit this forum i love everyone here far too much to leave...*huggles everyone immensly*

Wow Sasha! It made perfect sense to me. Very nice with matching the mood. At the end I really liked that. You used "his" way of speaking. (you know, with the "my sweet" and etc.) That was an awesome poem, and I am honored that my story inspired you. Is the end to your poem kind of like taking off where I left off at the end of my story? That's what it reminded me of. Maybe what he would say to her if I were to continue to the story. And I am thinking about it, especially after reading your poem and seeing that you understood my poem and that it made an impact. You are wonderful Sasha, and thank you. *huggles*


*goes back to read all of your new thread*

It was more of a what would have happened if the story had gone further type of deal....i am glad that you like it. Your story was heartfelt and i could see a lot of your characteristics in it, even the detail of the untied shoe laces...and i took that and i made a poem off of your story, though if you haven't read the story first it might not make sense. Thank you for visiting my Lovely Lace

:cofpap: *cracks knuckles and takes a sip of her coffee*



This is a very interesting poem. Has a strong structure. The rhyme was simple and flowed nicely. I loved everything, it had lovely imagery but one thing:



Just a suggestion, if you left out “very” it would help the rhyme flow of those two lines.



Yet another suggestion (not insulting your work just giving advice, your choice what you do with it babes) Maybe it could be “Alone on the peak of damnation and lifeless trees of memory”

And just one more thing, the very last verse was lovely but I was thinking maybe you could add a word to describe heaven’s face like “heaven’s angelic face” to elongate the sentence so it doesn’t seem too off beat when you read the second sentence that rhymes with it.




*nods* Nice poem sweets. Generically depressing. It kind of sounds like a verse to some sort of song. Ever think of writing one?



Hehe. You’re right. They do seem like they go together. This also sounds like it would be a verse in some sort of song. I like this one better though. It’s more descriptive.



Ok, you KNOW everyone has had this dream before. And when people explain it. It sounds like nothing, but you have brought out what kind of terror invades your soul as you dream this. I don’t really have anything to criticize. It isn’t the “best poem in the whole world” nor is it ANYWHERE near poor or just ok. It was a good poem hun. Lovely job.



Love this poem. I like how you based it on a Greek Myth. I have made I think two comments on it in your old threads. If you want me to copy and paste what I said. Let me know and I will.



Wow. Awesome vocabulary!! Whoo I wish I knew some interesting words like that. (I had to go look up a few) I like the style two. With the three lined verse thing.



Yea, I’ve commented on this one too. I remember saying it reminded me of the beginning in Beauty and the Beast, where Belle is running through the woods from the wolves and its all scary and stuff. It’s kind of….weird. But in a good way.



Great poem. A bit unorganized though. I kind of lost the point of the poem. But all in all your descriptions are great and each line was written slowly and nicely. :cofpap:


I loved all your poems hun. But you have more that are just as great!! I didn't see that one with the line that I loved it was something like "Silver sadness drip from distant eyes" or something. Post that one! Love ya babes.

I wish I had read your all of your old thread if these poems are at all reminiscient of those past.. you are a brillant writer and use such wonderful word choice! I look forward to more from you! being an inferior writer to you I can only give one piece of criticism.. having made the same mistake on nearly all of my own work.. I now find it relevant to take time and really organize the thoughts... although they are all great poems.. I fear that without some more organization to them.. they may be lost to some... regardless.. I'm deifinately a fan!

~dark prince~

tsk tsk. i've missed here tons of work. I hope i'll find time to read most of them. :)

NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!
not my baby... I just got her... I wub.. my pretty little sasha... she'ssss sooo kooooot.. *giggle*
at the moment.. she's sleeping on my bed.. she likes all my pillows... she likes hiding in them..

Astarael this is by far the most beautiful poem i have read in my life I almost makes me long for another companion.. I love it *bows in respect*

damn i got myself all pumped up to finish reading through as many of your poems before i had to go pick my brother up, and i ran out of poems to comment on heheh
so, here's my slab of comments for each and every one of these AWESOME poems you've posted here, and to demonstrate that MY WAY IS BETTER AND TAKES UP LESS SPACE, i only quoted the title of each poem
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that is quite an impressive poem and a

transformation i am fairly familiar with


wow! i really loved this one! got pretty immersed

despite a couple errors here and there ("Haunt

lurks" should probably be "Haunts lurk" and

"Falling to meat" should probably be "Falling to

meet")
*claps and reads on*


sorry for being repetitive, but wow! this is a very

strong poem and i just love the words you use. i

think it's time i started enriching my vocabulary

again
"cataclysmic despondence" <==


the flow broke off a little bit by the time it got to

the end, but this is such an awesome poem!

sounds like me in one of my lunatic raving poems

about bringing destruction to the world :D


we're almost the same again in this poem. the

only difference is that if i had written it, it would

involve splattering on the floor when it returned

beneath me and then lay there dying. for all the

rest, *does the lazy thing again*, ditto


*sighs while reading your words* as i've said a

few times already, you are like a mirror of my

soul. if you showed me a poem i wrote years ago

and asked me if it's yours or mine i'd probably

have a hard time answering. i love the words and

phrases you use




you got me captivated with this one. i don't usually read poems this long *hides* but i couldn't stop reading this one. once again, i really love the way you write... well, more than that, but let's just stick to writing *smile*

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keep writing, you rock!

Thanks everybody

QUOTE

("Haunt lurks" should probably be Haunts lurk)

dark it was only supposed to be about one stalking shadow so i put 'haunt lurks'

QUOTE

Alone on the peak of damnation and lifeless trees of memory

The reason why i put "alone on the highest peak of damnation, the lifeless tree of memory" was because i was talking about the tree not the person at the time.

And when i was typing Trapped and Infected in it did make me think that i need to write a song i just never have before and i don't think that i would know how...

Other than that i took everyone's criticism to heart and changed some of the poems on my comp, thank you so much it helps immensly

Upon Lacey's request...

Falling

Guided by a thoughtless vision
Release close at hand
Drawing closer to the edge
Driven by memories and despair
Wind singing songs of sorrow
Acid rain drops all around
Rolling black demon clouds
Silver sadness drips from distant eyes
With each careful step forward
Life falls further behind
Pebbles displaced from their rest
Plummeting to rocky grave
Standing on the brink of existance
Shadow descending
Leaping from the precipice
To empty abyss
Falling

Favorites list...

Memory one of Shardsie's favs

In the memory you will find me
Locked away in these thoughts of tragedy
Forgotten in the hopeless visions long past
Searching for a window, freedom, a savior
Struggling to escape, fighting the creator
Then the epiphany long overdue
Realization that keeps me here is you
The good and the bad flash before my eyes
Why did i put up with it, why did i believe your lies
Daydreams blur, and retreat into obscurity
Remembrance of all your alibis for promiscuity
As the spell of your false love breaks
Sight clears and i'm left wading through mistakes
Everything i believed true is now gone
But rising from it, hope, a harmonious song
Though i have nothing, i do not despair
Left with a blank pallet, no need for repair
Life may once more begin anew
No longer hiding in my longing for you
I won't stand to be cast aside, living in memory
Now letting go of all you meant to me

Searching Donovan's fav

Walking down the darkened hallways
Lost in a maze of endless corridors
Answers and the truth that i seek
Hidden away behind one of the infinite doors

So many there are, how couls i possibly choose
But i keep moving forward as if guided by an invisible force
Heart quickens as expectation mounts high
Sensing that i'm nearing the end of this winding course

Rhythm fades as footsteps fall away and heartbeat does linger
Cracks in the frame reveal a captivating golden hue
Hand clasped around the doorknob, wrenching the barrier open
With prelude of blinding light i am given every answer i will ever need
You

Revenge one of my personal favorites

She looked to the heavens up at my face
Calling for destruction and despair
The sky opens and torment rains free
Wrath poored forth unto the condemned
Gales of wind rip apart the unworthy
Lightning strikes with deadly precision
Tsunami swallowing its victims whole
Daggers of ice pierce the enemy's flesh
Blood precipitates from poisoned clouds
Tornadoes of terror wreak havoc on all
Cascade of white burying the dead
The planet trembles under fury
Bowels of the earth exposed
Shrouded is the sun, gates of hell released
The unfathomable abyss of infinite universe
As the world sinks into darkness
Angel of vengeance at my mercy...

I loved you're new poems... sorry I can't specify, but I have to go... Bye Bye.

here is one i typed in computer class the other day...

Love Depart

The world has ended and forgotten its trace
Fallen from the sky and descended from grace
The crimson crying eyes of children mourn
Small hearts are bloody, tattered and torn

Pitch rises to peak of deafening lament
Souls scream in their secular torment
Clinging to hope of life but in the end all will fail
Reduced to the abyss, in sadness they bewail

But above the turmoil laughter breaks the air
The chaos and destruction wrought without care
Immortal shadow of evil with only vicious trait
Divine spirit watching from above, one of livid hate

She calls out to him in unyielding desperation
Inquiring deadly motive for such devastation
Angel watching as her legacy becomes but a dream
But retort was not one desired, the apocalypse forseen

Human greed grows without end to claim the world their own
Into the flesh of the earth damage has been sown
Mortal minds have turned from their demanded faith
Reducing themselves to soulless empty wraiths

Yea it sucks...but i wrote it fairly quickly, any criticisms would be greatly appreciated

It certainly does NOT SUCK! In fact, I really, really enjoyed this once, Sasha. It was..beyond my words. Your depiction of the apocolypse and torment was just amazing..I really felt something in this one. The introduction was beautiful..you started off with a strong foot and give me a clear picture of the sorrow. Everything flowed well and was just overall amazing. Especially the story line!
There were a few lines, though, that I caught.

The flow was thrown off. Could it be "Souls scream in their secular torment"?

Take out the a in "without a care"? It's just easier to read and flows better.

This line was awesome, but the second part threw it off. Could it be "Divine spirit watching, one of livid hate"? Divine, as you know, usually means something dwelling in the heavens. That way you clean it up a bit.


Unless I put the wrong accents on here, this one didn't ryhme. I really don't have anything to suggest for it though.


These lines were BEAUTIFUL. Perfect flow and such imagery. You captured the whole point of the poem in these two lines which is simply amazing.

I think this one might be my favorite

I maade some adjustments and i hope this version is better

Thank you Shards for your help

Falling
i'm not quite sure how to phrase a response to this one. it's just beyond my comprehension, but what little i do understand, i like :)

Memory
i love this one! i sooooo went through that!

Searching
awwwwwww :)

Revenge
wooooooooowwwwwwww, this one made me shiver! i love how you create such intense images with your poems and evoke emotions within the reader

Love Depart
*slaps you around*
*kisses you better*
how the heck can you possibly have the NERVE to say this sucks?? i like the changes you made to it (from shard's quotes). i especially like

and there was another set of lines that made my mouth drop but i can't pick it out now. overall, WOW! "awesome" is the only word i can think of that really describes what i think of this poem. amazing imagery as usual, and the way you say things just blows me away.
the language loves you, mistress, and you seem to love it equally as much :)

Well... ~sigh~ ya'll haven’t left me with much to say have you !! ~puts hands on hips~ lol. Revenge did as dark remarked send a shiver up spine when I read it, yet Love Depart I must say, HAS TO BE my new absolute fav. I mean, there’s not very much I can say here which I haven’t already praised you with b4. But I’ll leave you with the notion that your work is in fact getting stronger by the day. And each new verse I read I am rendered baffled in your superiority.

:meow: -kat- :meow:

*basks in the flattery* luv you guys lots

Another older one...

Forgotten

Acid tears rain down a mournful face
All of the mistakes that could not be erased
Pain evident in saddened, crying eyes
Eating away at the cloak of lies
Wounds wash away under forlorn rain
Pulling free of controlling, binding chain
Falling from dismal skyward prison
Breaking water's surface in a drowning indecision
Creatures pass just beyond frightened sight
Darkness reaching from below, but above a shining light
Strong hands plunge down, touch of salvation
In clinging grasp, rising from swallowing damnation
With the bitter cold biting air, gasping for life's breath
Relieved to finally have escaped certain death
Gazing upon the vision of debted stranger
Savior from fear and present danger
Captivated by the sigh of angelic entity
Love fills a withered heart with empathy
Every memory returns to lost soul then
"I knew you would return to me again"

Sacrifice

Slitting my wrist before your eyes
Writing my sorrows upon the wall
Spelling out my pain with bloody fingers

Crimson stains upon my favorite dress
Trail behind me of lonesome fallen drops
Regret pooling at your feet on the floor

Taking the blade's edge to my neck
Bathing in my bleeding wounded despair
Hair matted up with solemn drying tears

Hanging myself from the cathedral ceiling
My vision slowly begins to fade
Life losing its grip on my tormented heart

Sinking further into desecrated agony
Lost in the darkened abyss of judgment
Light of redemption swallowed in the darkness

Will you save me from this destiny
Guide me from eternal damnation
Or must i rid the world of my mistakes

For my treason may i ever be forgiven
Allowed back into the confines of your heart
Or is death the only solution to end this madness

Surrounded by candles with glowing flame
Pleading for salvation, a lost child
Sacrifice for the evanescence of god's love

Another new one *~*~yay~*~*

Forever

Alone in the darkness
A soul slowly wanders
Searching for something
Yet hoping for nothing
Pleading for death
As the heart is inside
Call forth the demons
To battle god's angels
Spirits fighting endless battles
Reigning in a tortured mind
Reaming brazen flesh
Chilled skin of the broken
To mimic the emptiness
Within a form so black
Crying out to the skies
Summonging the judgment
That is fated to have come
The price that must be paid
For all of the pain
The sins, and the strife
As fallen face of beauty
Drops to cut and bleeding knees
Tears flow down white cheeks
As heart and soul sigh with relief
The struggle is over
End has finally drawn near
With devil's blade
Plunged through her chest
Wide eyes and last breath
She sinks to the ground
In shallow pit forever remain
Laying forgotten in the earth
Mother nature's coffin
To bury another lost soul

Forgotten
awww i love this oneeeee i'd be so giddily happy if i had something like this dedicated to me (after punging into swallowing damnation to save the person of course!) very beautiful poem :)


Sacrifice
i learnt a new word!!
heheh
your poem is scary. there's this immensity in the sadness and pain of it that almost hurts


Forever
*mouth drops and can't find words* i love the way you write, it is just so unlike anything i've ever read before. i've already read quite a few poems of yours, but it seems you never cease to amaze me with each new poem. the imagery in this poem is just, *shivers* too good.
*poke* i thought you weren't into religion heheh looks like you could be into anti-religion though ;) which again brings me to that anti-christ comment i made about goths yesterday heheh

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keep writing so i can keep reading :D
and make sure you have a look at my thread since no one else seems to be doing so :( there's even a really sweet dedication to you!! *hides the sly grin* :rolleyes:

I am not religious but yes i do hate religions and religious symbols very much, and i may be almost the anti-christ ((you surely wouldn't be the first to make that statement)) but that does not mean that all goths are...I will visit your thread and thank you for the post

well, i have no problem with religion as such. the fundamental principles that religion initially brought into a savage world helped bring us where we are today. collectivism and co-existence were two of religion's greatest achievements i think. it's just that, in today's world, a church, especially the christian church (i run into them more often), are nothing but massive corporations out to survive in a constantly changing business environment. people and their faith are customers and the priests are but tools of the top-down hierarchy of the church.
even beyond that though, how much nerve does it take for a man who is 5000 kilos heavier than he should be, adorned in gold-woven robes, with a pure gold sceptre in his hand and an equally expensive crown, to come to me and try to teach me about equality and sharing with the poor man next to me?
with the exception of bishops and stuff and the child molester priests, the rest aren't too bad. that doesn't make me like them though :P
i envy their ability to draw strength from something that only exists in their minds, but i am not prepared to give up the sheer scientific knowledge that has been wrought into me during my upraising in order to believe that it was god's will for a relative to die or for me to pass a test.

okay, i'm done spilling in your thread :D

the only thing i like about religion is the discussions it sometimes spurs hehe
see you next time you post ;)

hmmmm a new thread .... I havent been around for a while huh?..... all your old poems are gone that makes me sad I liked your old work ! anywaz your poems are still amazing ! I love them so much you are a very talented young girl and I am jelious of your ability to write ! keep it up or I will make a grave for you right next to all my :vampire: victims .... love you

awww can i get a too?? maybe then i'll get a decent eternity's sleep :ph34r: besides, i've never been a :vampire: victim before, it could be fun! i'd get to stay awake during the nighttimes that i hate and sleep during the daytime that i ... enjoy... damn heheh maybe i'd be special and be able to stay awake for ever, or sleep forever :D

*is done spamming sasha's thread again* :rolleyes:

so much evil spammage... :spam:

Punisher

Staring into the endless mirror
Eyes fall ashamed from the image
To rest on the cracked tile floor
Returning warily to their purchase
But orbs of blue are lost from view
Blood flows down replacing the tears
Though if eyes are pierced and dying
How can the enemy glare balefully back
Scream rises from a terrified throat
Reflection crawls through unseen portal
Slowly emerging from the glass
Knife in hand with malicious grin
Stumbling back with catching breath
Airway constricted with invisible grasp
With evil drawing ever nearer
Lamb is cornered with no escape
Maniacal laughter fills plaintive thoughts
Dagger plunging down to take its bounty
But as blade strikes white vulnerable breast
The vision fades into eerie darkness
And eyes ease open once more
Gazing into the curse'd mirror
The only true nemesis is one's self

Shadow Cast

Walking through Eden's glory
Though eerie in the glow of moonlight
Still magnificent under the glinting stars
Striding through the entrance
Tormented screams fill terrified ears
Once songs of harmony and love
Now shrill peals of enduring agony
Running for on desperate limbs
Crouching low behind sprawling stone
Clinging desperately to its rocky surface
The voices halt in their despair
Protection crumbles beneath fearful hands
Jumping aghast from unintended destruction
Damage to the biblical paradise
Seductive hymns emanate from a single flower
Blossoms surrounding pale in comparison
To its bright and lovely presence
Captivated by its exquisite image
Plaintive fingers graze a single petal
But from that caress tragedy does fall
Cold blackness consumes the vision
Withering as the condemned stumbles away
The very grass wilting under deadly touch
Glistening tears drop from saddened eyes
Fire leaps forward as they strike the ground
Fleeing consequence of unnamable sin
Scarring all in disgrace's wake
Collapsing past the gates of heaven
Final gaze upon the marren face of beauty
Before flames erupt in nirvana's threshold
Barring lost soul's admission

Hmmm...hello there young one...I have no critique for today...but I will tomorrow...

nice to see your fleeting presence again donovan *gives you a quick hug before you leave*

Another work by Sasha and the Lady Shards



Queen of Shadows

Come the night, she will reign
Tormenting souls and crippling sane
Great torrents of swirling rain
Tearing limbs and screaming pain
Sceptor lightning with resilient flashes
Corroding shores in liquid crashes
Over tumuluts of radiant beams
Throwing bolts of subtle gleams
To evade morning's bare content
From elegies ode and forlorn ascent
And flowing sinuous plains
Will spare their harvest grains
And succumb to monarch's power
Of dawn's approaching hour
As stars glow in their final rays
Last shining hope before the coming day


any comments or critisism would be highly appreciated

I love the way you leave your poems for anothers interpritation. This one could symbolize alot of things to alot of different people. *bows to the master and smiles warmly*

I am far from the master but i appreciate your comments for you seem to know a lot of where i come from in the meanings behind my poems. I'll make sure to check out your thread soon Skorne

Hee Hee "Oh Mighty Master!!"

~Pokes You~