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This thread is closed. I am writing under a new name. If you've read my work you will regconize who i am.
Wow.
Im gonna save these poems.
You need to start sending these to publishers!!
Im gonna save these poems.
You need to start sending these to publishers!!
Aaaaa beautifull I luv them. Please continue with you work.
Luv,
Narti
Luv,
Narti
Don't enter here expecting something good? . . .You should not speak lies my dear, for you are very good!
Yours ,
Blackorchid
Yours ,
Blackorchid
Ohhh dont worry, Im just keeping them to read over again. I would never abuse your good nature.
Thanks for posting them :)
Thanks for posting them :)
*gasp!* I'm In love! This is the best poetry I have EVER read! Must... Have... More... *Smiles sweetly* You're VERY good. Keep it up! I'm waiting ^_^
im in Love.. you are a beautiful writer, I wish I was as good as you -.- Please keep going I want more!A loving admirer and adoring fan,
*~*Sereene*~*
QUOTE (*~LustedLace~* @ Oct 8 2003, 09:23 PM)
Ecstasy
brooding eroticism
possesive dominance
soft velvet over iron
sweet agony is a promise
hot slickness
and warm honey
a flicker of tounges
over skin that is satiny
crimson liquid
seeping through fingernails
this pain so erotic
as soft skin pales
harsh pleasure growls
soft little moans
long deep strokes
in her core his shaft roams
alive with color
resonance of ecstasy
rippling muscles
gripping and releasing
tickling sensitivity
frustratingly teasing
gently nibbling
the torture so pleasing
again and again
thrustig against hips
skin rubbing in rythum
as louder cries escape lips
no tenderness now
just the need for release
beastly hunger rises
making the tension increase
bursting into her
panting heavily
hearts beathing as one
as he moves,now, slowly
trembling in his arms
endless convulsions
feeling a sense of completion
a pleasure to his satisfaction
eyes cloudy with passion
faces sexily drowsy
the scent of sec in the air
hands caressing endlessly
together they sleep
on her he lays above
irrevocably bound together
and for eternity, always in love
brooding eroticism
possesive dominance
soft velvet over iron
sweet agony is a promise
hot slickness
and warm honey
a flicker of tounges
over skin that is satiny
crimson liquid
seeping through fingernails
this pain so erotic
as soft skin pales
harsh pleasure growls
soft little moans
long deep strokes
in her core his shaft roams
alive with color
resonance of ecstasy
rippling muscles
gripping and releasing
tickling sensitivity
frustratingly teasing
gently nibbling
the torture so pleasing
again and again
thrustig against hips
skin rubbing in rythum
as louder cries escape lips
no tenderness now
just the need for release
beastly hunger rises
making the tension increase
bursting into her
panting heavily
hearts beathing as one
as he moves,now, slowly
trembling in his arms
endless convulsions
feeling a sense of completion
a pleasure to his satisfaction
eyes cloudy with passion
faces sexily drowsy
the scent of sec in the air
hands caressing endlessly
together they sleep
on her he lays above
irrevocably bound together
and for eternity, always in love
OMG! this is my altime favorite one :) :)
Ecstasy is the best I have to agree :D
QUOTE (*~LustedLace~* @ Oct 8 2003, 09:51 PM)
wow i didnt expect replies so early, thank you very much. Im glad you enjoyed them. Um i know this wont help any but if you copy them......please dont use them these poems are my thoughts and my heart and soul spilled onto paper and i would rather anyone not steal such generic ideas. Thanx. ^_^
i kno exactly how you feel lace, and your work is very much from the soul*hugs her* keep up the good work!!! :D
Damnit. Now I'm horny Lacey. Damn you.
I totally LOVE 'suicide', it's like, perfect. Very meaningfull, to me.
And Ecstacy...has me all...well...damn you!
I totally LOVE 'suicide', it's like, perfect. Very meaningfull, to me.
And Ecstacy...has me all...well...damn you!
Wow...excellent work... i mean...like...whoa...haha
damn i sound like a valley boy or something....
but really...excellently written...you have power in your words that is rare among writers... keep it up...
~Acyd
damn i sound like a valley boy or something....
but really...excellently written...you have power in your words that is rare among writers... keep it up...
~Acyd
lol*refers to ectasy* pervs we may be, but write stuff like that, and what do you expect?wow, i really like that one.......*blush*
lol, piont taken there laceybabe! ;)
Tee hee ^-^ Do you have any more poems/lyrics that we can read and awe over?
QUOTE
Madness
originality
individuality
always left bedhind
so lonely
a captive beauty
finally lost her mind
insanity
profanity
caught up in a lie
depravity
humanity
why do you cry...?
This one stood out to me...
I like it Lacey, very well written. It's a strange viewpoint, indeed.
ME likes me likes. And I have to agree with blackorchid. You are very talented and I should of came here sooner. Please post more.
Lady Luna
Lady Luna
*claps* Your work is beautiful Lace, *wipes away a tear* I love it. really, keep it up. aviento
much love
((Rae))
much love
((Rae))
Ps: The first one, Suicide Is my favorite :D
:D
Ah. Lace. I love you. ^_^ Sorry. Poems do that to me *Coughs* Anyways! I will await once more for some of that beautiful... Oh... Your work makes me happy. KEEP WRITING!!!! And... I would enjoy it if I saw some more vampire work in here! Your work is simply amazing... Oye. I LOVE YOU!
I am so totally smittened! I love them all so much!Xx: Niqui :xX
beuatiful! keep it up love :):)
love it as always darling, The rape one was sad, but good allthemore
love it as always darling, The rape one was sad, but good allthemore
Eep. *Covers her mouth. After a few seconds manages to say: "Very good.."* Ah. I'm not gonna say I love you again. Probably scared you the first time ^_^ Anyways. Oh... That Story!!!!! It's simply... Wow..It's good. Very, very, VERY good. I love the 'Hurt' Poem. Yay! You rock.
heheh I love your poems their make me stop and think a bit. WHich is strange. *hits head* cause they should be obesses but well IT's me. My fav so far is misunderstood or crazy. heheh reminds me of me. heheh Anyway hope to hear more from you.
Love,
narti
Love,
narti
Lacey, you have such talent, i wish that you would stop saying that your poetry is bad. No words can describe how i feel after reading your work. Ecstacy is my favorite. All your poems i can realate to, honestly i feel like you got into my fucked up lil mind and wrote what you saw. Beautiful simply beautiful.
Complete love and Admiration,
Damien ~The Beautiful Stranger~
Complete love and Admiration,
Damien ~The Beautiful Stranger~
If you asked me which of those were my favorite, I would have to say the mother one. I have no idea why, because it's quite a sad poem. *huggles her* Keep up the beautiful rythm Of words!!!
Ah, I bet it will be wonderful, like all of your other poems. I love the werewolf short section you wrote, it was simply amazing, And I bet your Vampire story will be just as good. Yes, the mother one did make me think, and I am very pleased to say that I do not relate to it ^_^ I have wrote many peoms about my mother, but I'm afraid that I do not get enough posts from people to keep it up, so I'm not going to make a topic *Smiles faintly* I suppose I'm not one of the wonderful poets such as yourself in this Forum. Anyways, Keep it up hun!!!
Ah! I love the first poem, as the second. The Story is... amazing. I read it and was like "Wow..." Tis all I could think of to say. Eep, I'm envious ^_^ Very good job indeed *nods her head* Any more poems? I simply love them.
WOW...SO VERY INSIGHTFUL...Your poems are like stories being told by an author of a certain place in time...a place most have ventured into...Very very nice
You dont fucking suck. theyre awsome and if I have to thwap you I will damn it I will!
lmao, maybe later. I still have to find my whip and chains
QUOTE (*~LustedLace~* @ Oct 8 2003, 10:10 PM)
Bleeding
Nails scathing cement walls
Bleeding fingertips
Screams cried that are not heard
Bleeding chapped lips
Body bruised from pouding walls
Bleeding boney hips
Rocks carving into flesh
Bleeding dented dips
Stomach claws at your meat
Bleeding from hungry nips
Torn, beaten, tethered, battered
Bleeding from the whips
Crying helplessly for nights
Bleeding eye rips
...Bleeding out my body's soul...
...Bleeding slowly, my life drips...
Hes Not There
do you think he hears you pray?
sobbing endlessly all day
he doesnt give a fuck about you
he doesnt care who you screw
he isnt guiding you through life
and hes not gonna save you from my knife
hes not sending angels to watch over you
and he doesnt care if your old or new
hes not gonna save your christian soul
theres no heaven either, no eternal joyous stroll
Now stop your crying, shut up bitch!
I'll cut you slowly but kill you quick
Scream! Scream! yea thats right
I'll see you later in hell tonight
...silence...
Madness
originality
individuality
always left bedhind
so lonely
a captive beauty
finally lost her mind
insanity
profanity
caught up in a lie
depravity
humanity
why do you cry...?
Nails scathing cement walls
Bleeding fingertips
Screams cried that are not heard
Bleeding chapped lips
Body bruised from pouding walls
Bleeding boney hips
Rocks carving into flesh
Bleeding dented dips
Stomach claws at your meat
Bleeding from hungry nips
Torn, beaten, tethered, battered
Bleeding from the whips
Crying helplessly for nights
Bleeding eye rips
...Bleeding out my body's soul...
...Bleeding slowly, my life drips...
Hes Not There
do you think he hears you pray?
sobbing endlessly all day
he doesnt give a fuck about you
he doesnt care who you screw
he isnt guiding you through life
and hes not gonna save you from my knife
hes not sending angels to watch over you
and he doesnt care if your old or new
hes not gonna save your christian soul
theres no heaven either, no eternal joyous stroll
Now stop your crying, shut up bitch!
I'll cut you slowly but kill you quick
Scream! Scream! yea thats right
I'll see you later in hell tonight
...silence...
Madness
originality
individuality
always left bedhind
so lonely
a captive beauty
finally lost her mind
insanity
profanity
caught up in a lie
depravity
humanity
why do you cry...?
Exquisite. Without flaws as far as I can see , along with some of the most interesting viewpoints i've seen in a while. :) Your werewolf story I liked especially.
See you around
,Blackorchid
My thread is Gothic/Morbid-inside my mind poetry and lyrics , come check it out:) Gimme some advice maybe!
Ok mean it this time LOL
Yours,
Blackorchid
Gah! Don't say you suck! You in no way; Any way whatsoever suck! *Twitches slightly* I'm Ashamed! ^_^ Just kidding. But still... Don't say you suck because... YOU DON'T!!!!
WOW!! lacey, great thread, i love all of your stuff. its all great. lol im posting from school soo... lol i have to be carful. so yeah, i love all your stuff, sorry i havn't posted on this thread in so long, but ya know, this is the only place that i can get online. n e way... 'l see you today!!! yippy!!!
mucho love,
Damien ~The Beautiful Stranger~
mucho love,
Damien ~The Beautiful Stranger~
DIAAAAMMMNNNNNNN Gurl. FUcking Awsome yes you are! -snatches some residued skills off of form and stuffs it in a box for later inspritation- Man Hun I love you stuff kickass major! well I'mma go post now ^-^ on my thread so stop by and tell me wahtcha think!
Sweet as a Hunny Bee sting
~Yuri~
Sweet as a Hunny Bee sting
~Yuri~
I love your work <3<3<3 keep it up! you inspire me ^_~
An admirer and Former stalker,
>mistressT<
An admirer and Former stalker,
>mistressT<
Hey love,
I'm sorry that everything is not going your way right now, i know how it feel and if you ever need to talk to me you know you just have to call me. you have my number and all you have to do i call sarah if you dont have it... there was a time in my life when everything seemed to be going wrong and nothing was happening for me, but then it all got better, trust me hun, it will all get better!!!
Eternal Love and Admiration,
Damien ~The Beautiful Stranger~
I'm sorry that everything is not going your way right now, i know how it feel and if you ever need to talk to me you know you just have to call me. you have my number and all you have to do i call sarah if you dont have it... there was a time in my life when everything seemed to be going wrong and nothing was happening for me, but then it all got better, trust me hun, it will all get better!!!
Eternal Love and Admiration,
Damien ~The Beautiful Stranger~
Oh, my sweet Lace *hugs her tightly* I am so sorry for both of your losses *pats her back gently* Recently one of my family members, too, passed away, along with that my father basically disowned me (Called me a whore, etc. and said that I was nothing) So.. I think this is just a rough thing that is going on right now. *Lets her go then kisses her on the forehead* I hope that everything turns out all right, and that people you know do not... Well... Meet their own demise. Yes, I know, my words are barely comforting, but I try. *smiles sadly* If you ever need to pour out your emotions on someone, talk to me.
keep it up love, its beautifully done. Please check out my works, and Check out my Picture forum =/ not the prettiest rose but meh, go check it out lol
Love,
XSis Mistress TX
Love,
XSis Mistress TX
wow...I so enjoyed reading your poems
It was definitely worth my time to stopin...Thank You
It was definitely worth my time to stopin...Thank You
HOLY MOTHER FUCKING SHIT! omg i am speechless. your work is indescribalby wonderful in every way shape and form. and i'm not just saying that. holy shit my stomach is quenching right now after i read just 3 of your poems. Lacey i love you. Marry me. :o :o 
:o :o :o
:o :o :o
Ah Lace! You've returned! *Smiles brightly* I missed your wonderful words! I hope you didn't have too hard of a time whilst you were gone. Personally I didn't have such great fun *Frown* Life is horrid. Well.. Most of it is. I missed you *hugs Lace* Please.. Do tell me how you are? I will listen gladly *Nods slightly*
hehe, well im glad to see someone missed me who actually reads what i write. Im am better thank you, just a little out of control but i'll pull things together in time. Life isnt horrid, whats horrid is those certain things that have been given life that make the world a difficult place. Thank you for replying hun. au revoir.
Ah. Well. I hope you get those small things cleared up. Been writing any new poems lately? I would love to hear them ^_^
Lovely work! you just keep amazing me keepit up lusted :) and come visit my thread ^_^
keepit up lusted :) and come visit my thread ^_^
hi people. um... im a newbie... 
just so you know. um... so i wrote this poem, eh. hope you like it!
you make me feel a way i know i never should
but my heart feels a way i never thought it could.
its a feeling i know is deeply wrong
but here i am to write you this song.
youre beautiful style and happy smile creep in to my thoguht
but then the idea "what if we got caught?"
its to much to risk, to much to give away.
but in your loving arms is where i long to stay
because i know its the only way my heart will ever be safe.
your soft skin unobstructed by clothes
but just enuf to imagine the most.
but these are the words never spoken to you
so ill never know if you feel like i do.
this feeling thats so wrong to me
and this is a love that is forbidden to be.
this is a light for you never to see.
"its a sin to feel that way!"
thats what they will all say.
But in return i will say,
"unlike you, shes there for me,
so it should be okay."
just so you know. um... so i wrote this poem, eh. hope you like it!you make me feel a way i know i never should
but my heart feels a way i never thought it could.
its a feeling i know is deeply wrong
but here i am to write you this song.
youre beautiful style and happy smile creep in to my thoguht
but then the idea "what if we got caught?"
its to much to risk, to much to give away.
but in your loving arms is where i long to stay
because i know its the only way my heart will ever be safe.
your soft skin unobstructed by clothes
but just enuf to imagine the most.
but these are the words never spoken to you
so ill never know if you feel like i do.
this feeling thats so wrong to me
and this is a love that is forbidden to be.
this is a light for you never to see.
"its a sin to feel that way!"
thats what they will all say.
But in return i will say,
"unlike you, shes there for me,
so it should be okay."
wait a second...ive read that poem! BREEZY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hm. I'm not at all disappointed with any of your new poems ^_^ They're good! Keep it up! *Nods*
wow, im all confused and stuff. i need guidence. HELP ME!!!
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